The preacher a boy and a question

The preacher a boy and a question

A Poem by Gee
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Listen, think, question

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The preacher man sat him down
fixed him with a stare,
removed his hat, cleared his throat,
plucked a bible from thin air.
Slid a chair with screeching legs,
sat down face to face,
opened up what he believed
to a carefully chosen place.

He read aloud the faded text,
powerful his voice,
hallelujahed, praised the Lord
at moments of his choice.
A tale he told of suffering,
forgiveness, and of love,
a son sent down as sacrifice
by his father up above.

"Amen", uttered the preacher man,
raised his bowed down head,
closed the book without a sound
then to the boy he said.....
"2000 years and still he lives
a faith born from his death,
only the good seen in mankind,
right to his final breath."

"He gave his life that we may live,
opened a righteous way,
paved it with the love of God
and we walk it to this day.
And on this path I'll lead you son,
pray, let me take your hand,
I'll guide you to a better life
into the promised land."

The boy he stared, thought awhile,
then to the preacher said...
"What proof have you apart from tales
of a man for so long dead.
And if you believe in stories old,"
he took the briefest pause,
"Do you believe in tooth fairies,
Easter bunnies and Santa Claus....."







© 2018 Gee



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Nicely penned
Enjoyed reading

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Gee

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you..
Dinesh Unlimited

2 Weeks Ago

Mention not
LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! You have found such a creative way to pose the lifelong questions many of us independent thinkers wonder about. The easter bunny & santa claus ideas are metaphors (for me) signifying all the tall tales we're told & expected to accept at face value. I love the way most of this poem simply states the typical words of faith & comfort that a preacher may convey, yet the crux of your message can be found in the last stanza, such a contrast from the rest! *smile* Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Margie, a fav of mine so glad you enjoyed
I like the way your words flow.
I am a Christian and even I have asked my pastor similar questions regarding blind faith. ( my question did not involve the Easter bunny) LoL

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Resa
The age old argument set in a jaunty 'angle' of a poem with panache and humor. Nice flowing verse.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Morning John, cheers
I really enjoyed your poem. I read it several times...nice work!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Thank you Nancy
A very understandable view in our society today with how Christianity has been represented by people who are high on power. Sad that truth has been misrepresented this way. I appreciate this poem, and very well written.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Gee

7 Months Ago

Sorry for the late reply. Thank you
i knew there was going to be a humorous twist to the end lol.
Beautifully rhymed i might add :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Stella Armour

8 Months Ago

You don't fool me...rhyme and flow were perfect, content brilliant !
Gee

8 Months Ago

Careful Stella,I'll have to buy a bigger hat !!
Stella Armour

8 Months Ago

(* -*) you deserve one for making me smile lol
I was not anticipating the ending! So beautifully written!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gee

8 Months Ago

Cheers Blake
A funny tale depicting the cheekiness of a child. That ending had me laughing. Notes (yay!):

1. Stanza 1, Last Line: no "to".

2.Stanza 2, Last couplet: there seems to be a subject/active verb missing here, for it doesn't appear to be part of the same thought as the previous thought, but rather another thought that's continuing from the previous one in which another active verb must be present....which you don't have.

3. Stanza 3, Last line: no "and" (not needed, and it just mars musicality)

4. Stanza 4, First line: this is more of a personal qualm than a legitimate suggestion, but I feel putting a pronoun right after the subject is a bit awkward when a "then" could be used instead. However the addition of "and" in the second clause would help the musicality flow better.

5. Last stanza, Penultimate Line: one more syllable so "fairy" doesn't hit the wrong sylLAble (for leaving it like that would force the reader to tweak the musicality awkwardly in order to say everything correctly).

This is a well-constructed tale otherwise. I quite enjoyed it.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Gee

9 Months Ago

Thank you Emi. I enjoyed writing this one and still enjoy reading it.
Mmmmmm- quite a well-penned challenge here...the young challenging the old institutions and ideas, as they should. Thought provoking, eloquent, lovely classical style, well-rhymed. Hope the preacher comes up with a good answer! Love this.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Thank you...

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Added on July 24, 2015
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Tags: Preacher, Jesus, God, faith, scepticism, Easter bunny, tooth fairy, Santa Claus

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