My final breath, a sigh

My final breath, a sigh

A Poem by Gee
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Accepting the inevitable

"
I had neither time nor patience
and this I so relayed,
annoyance being the tone I used
but still the stranger stayed.

I bid him sit if stay he must
offering him a chair,
this he declined without a word
but with a steely glare.

That chilled my bones to marrows core
withering my very soul,
a shadow crossing o'er my heart
a shadow black as coal.

It was then I knew my time was his
he'd called to still the hands,
to lead me from this mortal coil
and to the promised lands.

So silently I left with him
my final breath a sigh,
of sadness that my life was done
and this my time to die............


























© 2017 Gee



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How you can create such a near jolly rhythmic ring to such a dark subject amazes me, Gree!. You use great language to state the obvious but somehow make light of it! Perhaps we drift into acceptance rather than fight i? Fine language, come what may.!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Jeepers, rude of me
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

smiling, manners comes to she who waits and is pretty bad at remembering until three years later! read more
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

Just realised i forgot !!!! Many thanks for asking re things in Italy..nothing new at present. Ble.. read more
It made me shiver.Great use of language.Well done!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Goooooooooooooood morning Ms P. Hope all is well with you.
Thank you kindly for both reading .. read more
Ms Paragon

1 Month Ago

My pleasure!Enjoy your Sunday!
Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you, you too
Gave me chills...nicely done! :) x

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Tina
I can see I read this a year ago but it still holds. Beautifully written.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Thank you..
Very "Dickenson" of you :) But I did enjoy this and the simple meter used with olde English slang. :) well done.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Cheers JB, thanks for reading
I would have kicked him out and told him where to go lol

loved the flow and rhyme :)


Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Thank you Stella
Ah the grim reaper, persistant little pest wasn't he? You offered him a chair? We all have to go one day, but I'd much rather not share my final breath with him. Nicely told narrative Gee. An entertaining read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Thank oh Christine
Gee

3 Months Ago

Grrrrrrr.........you
Oh nooh the grim reaper but don't die on us yet for your poem if u write like this is just too awesome. Flows so well, rhymed marvellously too. I'm awed by this imaginative poem. I tink it is a masterpiece. Kudos.


I'm quite a newbie here, Pleez do review, write your thoughts under my newest poem too. I like interactives , like making friends and am used to exchange of comments.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Is that my old friend zay zay from other pastures?
S.zaynab.kamoonpury

3 Months Ago

Oh my tell me this is u Christine, not only your poem is exceptional, rather u are soo beautiful. So.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

Not me in the pic, I will message you Zay. I left a comment on Gee's poem and noticed your name.
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BBP
I liked how you portrayed the reaper as an annoying stranger.... clever, clever!

I enjoyed this one Gee.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Cheers. I get the impression that more and more elderly folk view death more as an inconvenience rat.. read more
BBP

4 Months Ago

Yeah it's already, I haven't been inconvenience with death lately so I'm doing good! ;)

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Added on May 30, 2016
Last Updated on April 22, 2017
Tags: Life, death, time

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Gee
Gee

Milton keynes, United Kingdom



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