My final breath, a sigh

My final breath, a sigh

A Poem by Gee
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Accepting the inevitable

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I had neither time nor patience
and this I so relayed,
annoyance being the tone I used
but still the stranger stayed.

I bid him sit if stay he must
offering him a chair,
this he declined without a word
but with a steely glare.

That chilled my bones to marrows core
withering my very soul,
a shadow crossing o'er my heart
a shadow black as coal.

It was then I knew my time was his
he'd called to still the hands,
to lead me from this mortal coil
and to the promised lands.

So silently I left with him
my final breath a sigh,
of sadness that my life was done
and this my time to die............


























© 2017 Gee



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Awesome poem! I really like the underlying darkness that starts from the beginning. Keep up the good work!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Cheers....
I enjoyed reading this ballad; it reminded me of Emily Dickinson in structure and in subject (she was obsessed with death, as I've no doubt you're aware). Nice to see that you managed to stick to the conventions of the form (alternating tetrameter and trimeter), as this is rare and takes discipline.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Gee

1 Month Ago

Thank you. The form is just pot luck, I write and read back just to ensure that the piece is not to .. read more
That anonymous visitor will call with us all at some point or another, and his entreat is a one way ticket to wherever?

Marvellously moribund and foreboding, loved it!!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Thank you Tom
Beautiful
I have to write at least 25 words but beautiful is all I have.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Thank you..
this so good and so wonderful to read!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Thank you...
very nice to read no time no patience

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Cheers.....
Simple rhyming with simple words ... but oh so effective. You had me sitting on the edge of my chair, wondering if I too was about to breath my last breath! Good poem.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Cheers, simple is as simple does
A bright pace to this somewhat morbid and once again, imaginative and descriptive piece Gee

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Thank you John
Powerful and amazing writing. The stranger is always with us but we only see him when it is our time to go with him.
He who is loved by that stranger, attains salvation without any effort.
Good, nicely done:)

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Thank you Manasa
He is not one to negotiate or discriminate. Beautifully written.
Cold and eerie.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Gee

7 Months Ago

Thank you kind lady. Hope you are well
Ana Papaya

7 Months Ago

You're welcome Gee. I am well and hope you are too.
:)
Gee

7 Months Ago

All is fine in Blighty thank you

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WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
A teen boy gets killed, but trades his soul for another chance. He changes. A girl notices the new boy with silver eyes.
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Gee
Gee

Milton Keynes, United Kingdom



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