In An Instant

In An Instant

A Story by Gee
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How life can change oh so quickly

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I sat quietly watching her. She drank coffee whilst flicking through a gossipy magazine, pausing briefly every now and again to read a few lines or study a photo. I smiled to myself remembering our meeting, the pair of us worse for wear, booze, in a crowded Tenerife bar. We pretty much spent the whole of the next week together, drinking, laughing, loving.
When back in the UK 400 miles separated us , Scotland her home, England mine. As promised, a letter, the first of many written by me, lay waiting on her return from holiday (she had stayed on for an extra week ). I told her over and over how much I loved her, missed her, needed her, and that one day we would be married. That was June 1991.
October 1991 she moved down to be at my side. We married in October 1993.
Our daughter was born in November 2000, her mother's double. Beautiful, funny, clever, a most warm, generous human being, the Apple, orchard of my eye. Life has been nothing but great....25years of bliss.

" Have you any regrets " she once asked me, meaning of our life together.

" Only that we didn't meet earlier."

The doorbell rang. She placed the magazine on the cushion beside her.

" Mrs Jacky Stevenson " asked the young policeman.

" Yes, is there something wrong ? "

" Can we come inside Jacky" asked the young WPC.

As I left, she sat in stunned silence.......






© 2017 Gee



Author's Note

Gee
Hope you enjoyed. This is very much true to my life (apart from my demise.... obviously)

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I really liked how stunned I was at the ending and how I had to read it again. I thought I knew what it was about until I saw the tag of death then read the comments. My interpretation was completely different.



Posted 1 Week Ago


Gee

1 Week Ago

Thank you Martha
I enjoy the unknowingness of the end, however, I would like to know more of the moment. Enhance the dialogue of the story with the -show, don't tell- method.
Like, how did she set the magazine down? what was the tone of the officer? what was her tone when she asked what is wrong? what prompted you to leave and why?

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Gee

2 Weeks Ago

Hmmm, don't know whether that is good or bad
S. Elizabeth

2 Weeks Ago

Where do you see, in your writing, that draws the reader to that conclusion?
(I'm not trying .. read more
Gee

2 Weeks Ago

To be honest I write quickly, post, then leave it to the reader. Most of the other reviewers managed.. read more
I enjoy these types of endings, though not in a morbid way mind you. It does it's job and I can appreciate the work. Also, I didn't catch it right away.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Trajan
I very much enjoyed how the soft and gentle flow of the memories at the beginning then got so abruptly interrupted by the current reality. Nicely written!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Cheers Julia
Nice twist at the end there!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Gee

2 Months Ago

Thank you. True story until the last wee bit
Whoa-ho! Took me a minute, but well done. Sweet with a little bump-in-the-night at the end. Really liked this.
Needs a period after "...didn't meet earlier."
And a question mark after "...is there something wrong?"
Again, a very sweet offering.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Gee

3 Months Ago

Apologies for my punctuation and grammar. I never took a great deal of notice at school, hence my la.. read more
Carol Cashes

3 Months Ago

No lack of qualifications, dude, the content is excellent. A period? A question mark? Would that .. read more
I had to study the ending for a bit to get things clear. Everything seemed to be aimed at Jacky, then came the twist. Very good, captivating writing.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Thank you Samuel
Wow! I fell into your story and crash landed with the surprise ending. It reminded me of the second season finale to the show 'Afterlife' starring Andrew Lincoln. If not for 'The Walking Dead,' I probably would have never known about his roll in that series. The only bad thing about it is that it was only two seasons long, but what a great show. Thank you for the story and for the remembrance.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Thank you kindly
What an ending. Took me a while to get it but when I did! Tragic and wistful.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Cheers Ken. Selfishly I hope to be snatched before my good lady wife
Very apt title. Life can go so well, only to be suddenly change in an instant. Our existences are so fragile that they can be turned upside down in one day.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Indeed they can. Thank you Clifford

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