I am....

I am....

A Poem by Gee
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A constant

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I am night and day,
the sun and moon,
the ebbing, flowing tides.
I am the changing seasons,
reliable, predictable, dependable.
I am a smile for a sad face,
a dry shoulder for tears,
strong arms and a soft, kind heart.
I am proud, devoted, loyal,
loving..........irreplaceable.
I am eternally grateful,
grateful that I am her father.


© 2017 Gee



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I applaud you as a good father! Your loving, proud words are so touching and inspiring- you are everything to your daughter, as she is everything to you- "irreplaceable", yes. More fathers should be like you! Beautiful, lyrical and very important poem- good fathers make healthy, loving strong children. Kudos!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Thank you Annette, I am to her what I would have wished from mine had he hung around
Annette Pisano-Higley

10 Months Ago

Very impressed and proud of you G.! Bless...
i think this has a bit of a surprise ending which i really like...and i believe you have captured everything there is about what makes a Father ticks, and why a Father ticks....to be there for the daughter...

beautiful piece, Gee.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Than you Jacob
Gee

10 Months Ago

Thank.....
yep! in healthy situations that daughter/father relationship should be all that ..and our little girls know with assurance we will be there for them .. i clicked the pic to no avail .. who are they? is it a special occasion? the gratitude expressed in closing is the strongest part for me ..nicely done Gee.
E.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Thank you E. The pic is me and my good lady wife. We were attending a charity ball raising money for.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

ohhhh man! that is so special and precious..God bless her and all you around her...i am a retired RN.. read more
Gee

10 Months Ago

Cheers E, she's like a second daughter to me
Such a lovely poem.

The perfect father - apart from mine! Beautiful words, finely laid. 'I am eternally grateful' must be how you feel at having her in your life.

Believe me, all the men in your daughter's future life will need equal your daughter's darling dad!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Morning Emma, thank you. Hopefully she'll find a respectful fella with a good heart, hopefully....
emmajoy

10 Months Ago

Hopefully she'll find someone like her dad..
I love this, what a wonderful gift for your daughter - it's my daughter's 13th birthday today, I thought I'd slept in so got up an hour early to put her presents out an blow up balloons!! - I loved the last line the best - good stuff :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Hope you both have a wonderful day.
Thank you
KT-B

10 Months Ago

thank you - I've made an awesome strawberry and chocolate cake I just hope it tastes as good as it .. read more
My first baby was born just 6 months ago, so these feelings are new to me. I think you captured them just right in poem. I think having a child makes my smile broader, my arms stronger, and my heart kinder.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Congratulations, fun times ahead. Thank you
Yaaasssss...indeed! A good father is a daughter's best bet against all odds...

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

I never had a father in my life so I try to be to my daughter all that I would have wished for if mi.. read more
No words to say how beautifully this is written. It touched my heart.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Cheers Najam
..............wOw!........I felt the power of this one big time!! Two notes:

1. "the tides" - "moon" and "sun" are possessive (they're hers), and "the tides" seem to follow that, so I would extend this line a bit to specify the tides that do something to her. Or, just change "her" to "the" and make the grand reveal at the end when you say "HER father".

2. "a love irreplaceable" - this line is powerful, but similar to the above note, this is a third item that should in some way follow how the other items flow. Here you have adjectives (proud, devoted, irreplaceable) which are separated by "a love" before the third. Those two words, though it creates a good musicality for the whole of the poem, hitting each syllable hard on their beats adds to the power. So "I am proud (!), devoted (!), irreplaceable (!)......no "a love" for that is already implied. Well done overall!

(those exclamation marks are not stressing to add them, they're just me demonstrating that having just the one word packs a good punch and adds power)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

You'll have me blushing. I judge myself on qualifications gained at school, nearer zero than 3.... .. read more
KT-B

10 Months Ago

Same - I never applied myself at all - oops! :)
emipoemi

10 Months Ago

......I was always the silent one in school......

But I second the notion to never cu.. read more

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