I am....

I am....

A Poem by Gee
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A constant

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I am night and day,
the sun and moon,
the ebbing, flowing tides.
I am the changing seasons,
reliable, predictable, dependable.
I am a smile for a sad face,
a dry shoulder for tears,
strong arms and a soft, kind heart.
I am proud, devoted, loyal,
loving..........irreplaceable.
I am eternally grateful,
grateful that I am her father.


© 2017 Gee



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Gee
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I love this, what a wonderful gift for your daughter - it's my daughter's 13th birthday today, I thought I'd slept in so got up an hour early to put her presents out an blow up balloons!! - I loved the last line the best - good stuff :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Hope you both have a wonderful day.
Thank you
KT-B

5 Months Ago

thank you - I've made an awesome strawberry and chocolate cake I just hope it tastes as good as it .. read more
My first baby was born just 6 months ago, so these feelings are new to me. I think you captured them just right in poem. I think having a child makes my smile broader, my arms stronger, and my heart kinder.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Congratulations, fun times ahead. Thank you
Yaaasssss...indeed! A good father is a daughter's best bet against all odds...

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

I never had a father in my life so I try to be to my daughter all that I would have wished for if mi.. read more
No words to say how beautifully this is written. It touched my heart.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Cheers Najam
..............wOw!........I felt the power of this one big time!! Two notes:

1. "the tides" - "moon" and "sun" are possessive (they're hers), and "the tides" seem to follow that, so I would extend this line a bit to specify the tides that do something to her. Or, just change "her" to "the" and make the grand reveal at the end when you say "HER father".

2. "a love irreplaceable" - this line is powerful, but similar to the above note, this is a third item that should in some way follow how the other items flow. Here you have adjectives (proud, devoted, irreplaceable) which are separated by "a love" before the third. Those two words, though it creates a good musicality for the whole of the poem, hitting each syllable hard on their beats adds to the power. So "I am proud (!), devoted (!), irreplaceable (!)......no "a love" for that is already implied. Well done overall!

(those exclamation marks are not stressing to add them, they're just me demonstrating that having just the one word packs a good punch and adds power)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

You'll have me blushing. I judge myself on qualifications gained at school, nearer zero than 3.... .. read more
KT-B

5 Months Ago

Same - I never applied myself at all - oops! :)
emipoemi

5 Months Ago

......I was always the silent one in school......

But I second the notion to never cu.. read more

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Added on June 29, 2017
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