Drinking for comfort, f*****g for food

Drinking for comfort, f*****g for food

A Poem by Gee
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A take on a single mums plight

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Four different fathers
a monochrome brood
drinking for comfort
and f*****g for food.
Best before blow jobs
use before shags
payment in polythene
half empty bags.
Laying and lying
but only to self
shop soiled, outdated,
left on the shelf

© 2017 Gee



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What people do sometimes looking for a place to feel loved and belong- sadness as it’s self destruction but each has a path to walk- pray people learn to love themselves no matter where they come from- very direct and full of passion and truth- great words- make people think🌹

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gee

2 Months Ago

Fleetingly perhaps. Thank you



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Right to the point!
It was a sad poem to read but it was filled with so many true emotions I can tell.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Gee

8 Months Ago

Thank you..
This piece was hard for me to read but we do what we have to do to survive. It's sad to me that women are put in this position. It should not be this way. A bittersweet write for me but brutally honest. Well done!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Gee

9 Months Ago

Thank you..
SJ Mullins

8 Months Ago

You are most welcome!
damn makes me think about how much we take for granted this is a F***ed world

Posted 9 Months Ago


Gee

9 Months Ago

Tis more prevalent than many think.
Thank you
soldier onwards

9 Months Ago

no thank you for writing this piece
Devastating portrayal of a depraved existence.
Incredibly sad!


Posted 9 Months Ago


Gee

9 Months Ago

Aye, more common than we'd like to believe. Cheers
I'm using discovery and it seems to keep putting me into contact with you like it knows something I don't. As for this and as well with the others your rhyme scheme is tight, the imagery is there, and more often than not I enjoy the hell out of them. So, I have to ask about the with best before part. Do you need with? Is it an instructive label on the bag? Usually like milk it starts best by yada yada or best before such and such date. Ditch the with is my critique my man, feels unnecessary. Otherwise, carry on!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Hmmm, perhaps Discovery is a sadist !!!
Change made, thank you, and thank you for reviewing.<.. read more
My fave. I'm not sure ppl catch the 'four different fathers, a monochrome brood' part, but it's absolutely perfect. I'm a fan!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Again thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. Very much based on my childhood
Sahm Moore

10 Months Ago

I'm sorry for your childhood, then. However.. the 'I am' piece sounds like you've done pretty well f.. read more
Gee

10 Months Ago

Kids are resilient and at the time because you know no different it was classed as normal.
Hard to read, but easy to understand. The luck of birth can govern environment, which ,in turn, can govern behaviour. Those that condemn the loudest, are often the cause of the problem.


Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Indeed. Cheers Norman
A unique twist on a not so uncommon situation for many. My teen years were spent on a housing estate with a bit of a bad rep and I saw this and worse on a daily basis. It wasn't all dark skies though, the one thing I do remember is that everyone looked out for each other and knew everyone else's name...Now I couldn't tell you what most of my neighbours looked like if I had a gun to my head. Changed days, in some ways good, in others nothing changes.


Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Thing is you grow up thinking it's a normal upbringing when it is everything but.
Cheers Lorr.. read more
"Shop soiled, outdated, left on the shelf"- Killer line, killer poem, killer situation. You nailed it graphically and honestly Gee. Language of the streets perfectly fitting the subject. Great flow and rhyme. Feral mothers trying to survive. "Laying and lying"-scathing, but so real. Brilliant!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

This was life in the sixties on the estate we were dragged up on. Many would open their legs, some p.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

10 Months Ago

You very certainly had a special mom Gee! And a very hard childhood from the sound of it...Your mom .. read more
Brilliant, Gee!

A very painfully brutal write, full of honesty and tinged with a large dose of reality for some in this existence.

Your tone and the rhyme is just superb. Heck! I didn't even know you could swear on this forum! But the vulgarity of those words just adds to the realism and sense of hopelessness of the subjects in this poem.

Extremely well done!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Gee

10 Months Ago

Cheers Doodley, this was life for quite a few on the estate we grew up on

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Milton keynes, United Kingdom



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