Drinking for comfort, f*****g for food

Drinking for comfort, f*****g for food

A Poem by Gee
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A take on a single mums plight

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Four different fathers
a monochrome brood
drinking for comfort
and f*****g for food.
Best before blow jobs
use before shags
payment in polythene
half empty bags.
Laying and lying
but only to self
shop soiled, outdated,
left on the shelf

© 2017 Gee



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I'm using discovery and it seems to keep putting me into contact with you like it knows something I don't. As for this and as well with the others your rhyme scheme is tight, the imagery is there, and more often than not I enjoy the hell out of them. So, I have to ask about the with best before part. Do you need with? Is it an instructive label on the bag? Usually like milk it starts best by yada yada or best before such and such date. Ditch the with is my critique my man, feels unnecessary. Otherwise, carry on!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Hmmm, perhaps Discovery is a sadist !!!
Change made, thank you, and thank you for reviewing.<.. read more
My fave. I'm not sure ppl catch the 'four different fathers, a monochrome brood' part, but it's absolutely perfect. I'm a fan!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Again thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. Very much based on my childhood
Sahm Moore

4 Months Ago

I'm sorry for your childhood, then. However.. the 'I am' piece sounds like you've done pretty well f.. read more
Gee

4 Months Ago

Kids are resilient and at the time because you know no different it was classed as normal.
Hard to read, but easy to understand. The luck of birth can govern environment, which ,in turn, can govern behaviour. Those that condemn the loudest, are often the cause of the problem.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Indeed. Cheers Norman
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A unique twist on a not so uncommon situation for many. My teen years were spent on a housing estate with a bit of a bad rep and I saw this and worse on a daily basis. It wasn't all dark skies though, the one thing I do remember is that everyone looked out for each other and knew everyone else's name...Now I couldn't tell you what most of my neighbours looked like if I had a gun to my head. Changed days, in some ways good, in others nothing changes.


Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Thing is you grow up thinking it's a normal upbringing when it is everything but.
Cheers Lorr.. read more
"Shop soiled, outdated, left on the shelf"- Killer line, killer poem, killer situation. You nailed it graphically and honestly Gee. Language of the streets perfectly fitting the subject. Great flow and rhyme. Feral mothers trying to survive. "Laying and lying"-scathing, but so real. Brilliant!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

This was life in the sixties on the estate we were dragged up on. Many would open their legs, some p.. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

4 Months Ago

You very certainly had a special mom Gee! And a very hard childhood from the sound of it...Your mom .. read more
Brilliant, Gee!

A very painfully brutal write, full of honesty and tinged with a large dose of reality for some in this existence.

Your tone and the rhyme is just superb. Heck! I didn't even know you could swear on this forum! But the vulgarity of those words just adds to the realism and sense of hopelessness of the subjects in this poem.

Extremely well done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Cheers Doodley, this was life for quite a few on the estate we grew up on
This poem made me feel really sad. It must be terrible to lose ones self esteem, giving up, and doing self deprecating things. And all for the sake of the children? Or is she beyond caring even for them? It made me feel like calling out to her , "don't despair! keep going."! A very moving little poem you have penned.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Gee

4 Months Ago

Cheers. We grew up on an estate where most families were fatherless and those that stayed were on th.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

4 Months Ago

mmmm, sometimes women are better off without that sort. But I suppose the Mums on the estate got tog.. read more
No happy romance or pretty bunch of flowers for this lady, just another day at the office and it's a hard old station!

Powerful and evocative, superb moving poetry Gee!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

A rum childhood Tom...thanks
Some single mothers do a great job. Some slide into the dark ways. Life is just f*****g tough for some. It's the cycle of kids who you hope prosper in the future.
Great write. Raw.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Ours worked herself into the ground. So much so that we were farmed out to kids and foster homes to .. read more
Paul Bell

5 Months Ago

You sure had a tough time. Women are definitely tougher than men in those situations. In a way, it m.. read more
Gee

5 Months Ago

Life lessons. Kids are very resilient so at the time whatever happened to us was regarded as " norma.. read more
Rhyming spree, here, and four different means to drink the s**t away... Half-empty bags of outdated law... Some things are best left on the shelf, but when that does not work... Shags in the dark always leave us soiled... Well penned, friend...

Posted 5 Months Ago


Gee

5 Months Ago

Cheers Silente

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