Tit for tat

Tit for tat

A Poem by Niall Madden

Inconsiderate,

They're barging in belligerent.

The legions form a scarlet horde,

Then in between the lines they soon bore.


They look at walls of alabaster grace pure architectural masterpiece,

"this brick is quite slanted"

"the colour is all wrong"

"the framework is poor"

"in all honesty I have seen better, much better"


You rapidly reply

"I can try and improve but if I am honest there is no need to be ru..."

but already they move with less than a whisper.

To undermine and impoverish your literary library


You rush to catch as the tears gush out,

Before you bellow "why have you done this, tainted my work with words"

within your kind eyes a galaxy of hurt,

The flock turns round with a grimace not smile

"you did it first. you did it first..."


© 2015 Niall Madden



Author's Note

Niall Madden
While I really like this site and many of the people are honest and constructive and helpful with their reviews it has been pointed out by many that some reviewers are not as kind and upon receiving criticism take it as an insult. This poem is how I feel about that.

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This is terrible work - go sit on the naughty writers step Niall (joking !!)

What a class place to gain inspiration from though - who would have thought that from such a neggy place (the critics who cant take criticism) there could have come this witty repartee.
You are talented Niall, must the Irish blood in you - (again joking !!)
Thanks for the RR - keep em coming my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Niall Madden

2 Years Ago

Haha good worried for a moment there.
Seriously appreciate you're review as always and the com.. read more
ANTO

2 Years Ago

Thank you Niall for the banter and the talented postings.



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Very good. Let's hope these people read your wonderful poem and reconsider their choice of words next time. Just one question: the first line of the second paragraph, is it supposed to be They look? May just be me, but just thought I'd point it out just in case. Good work.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Niall Madden

2 Years Ago

hopefully, im glad you liked the poem and enjoyed the message be sure to spread it. Thanks for point.. read more
This is terrible work - go sit on the naughty writers step Niall (joking !!)

What a class place to gain inspiration from though - who would have thought that from such a neggy place (the critics who cant take criticism) there could have come this witty repartee.
You are talented Niall, must the Irish blood in you - (again joking !!)
Thanks for the RR - keep em coming my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Niall Madden

2 Years Ago

Haha good worried for a moment there.
Seriously appreciate you're review as always and the com.. read more
ANTO

2 Years Ago

Thank you Niall for the banter and the talented postings.
I absolutely agree! Wonderful, my friend:)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Niall Madden

2 Years Ago

thank you, spread the message :)
Cool Girl

2 Years Ago

You're welcome!!

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Added on February 2, 2015
Last Updated on February 4, 2015
Tags: Review, Anger, Fustration, Hate, Upset, Writer, Unfair

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Niall Madden
Niall Madden

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