Wild-child

Wild-child

A Poem by Relic



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Laura girl~Baby-girl~
you're only eight months old~
I hope this crib can hold you in,
You're acting too darn bold!

Laura girl~Child-girl~
what are you up to now?
That riotous mood you're showing off
ain't good for you no-how.

Laura girl~Teenage-girl~
tell me where you've been? 
Hiding out with troubled boys 
Will lead to years of sin. 

Laura girl~Troubled-girl~
no wonder you're in jail~
Ingesting all those harmful drugs 
Has left you sick and frail.

Laura girl~Tragic-girl~
the police were at our door~
That car crash robbed your precious life~
a beer was on the floor!

Laura girl~Silent-girl~
you look like you're asleep
your casket's shine reflects my face
and all I do is weep.

Laura girl~Angel girl~
we're sending you our love~
Our broken hearts can only pray
you're somewhere up above.

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Author's Note

Relic
Note to self: Poem was revised on 7/27/15.

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this is also very very sad yet love how u wrote it her stages of life till her death
whew u are so talented

Posted 6 Days Ago


Relic

6 Days Ago

ha sometimes I wonder. lol Thank you marilyn for being so kind. :)
A poingnant and eloquent poem, skillfully crafted and,I felt, particularly thought provoking, great work

Posted 1 Week Ago


Relic

1 Week Ago

Thanks very much George.
George Coombs

1 Week Ago

Your welcome
I have no words....my voice is in my awe!! Well freaking done!!

(you forgot to insert "like" in "you look [] you're asleep")

Posted 1 Week Ago


Relic

1 Week Ago

AHHHH!! I knew I forgot something. lol Thanks so much for your observations. Not a lot of people h.. read more
emipoemi

1 Week Ago

a lot of people here are too shy to be bold.
Tragically sad 😢 piece of writing which for me reflects how in life ones guardians cannot shelter our live ones from the dangers society presents.
Deeply emotional but poignant and eloquent poem.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Relic

1 Week Ago

Thank you Mairie
Smoking Man

1 Week Ago

You're welcome 😊,my pleasure.
First, I love the picture that you chose to go with the poem. It's midway between the innocence of the beginning of the poem and the tragedy at the end.

The poem itself innocently takes the reader by the hand and unexpectedly leads them on a journey most unimagined. The love for Laura is portrayed throughout, and all one can feel for the writer is heartache.

There is such beauty in pain, but the thorns are really sharp.

Nicely penned.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Relic

1 Week Ago

I appreciate your thoughts Linda, thank you.
Wow...this sounds all too familiar..I am saddened by ur loss..I too was held in bondage by chemical obsession..I am very grateful to be here..I shouldn't be but God had other plans for me..

Posted 1 Week Ago


S.Jane

1 Week Ago

Oh I was raised to be a good person, a good woman...n shes always been in there but addiction turn.. read more
Relic

1 Week Ago

I have friends that have been addicted for decades. I don't know how they function but they do. It m.. read more
S.Jane

1 Week Ago

Sounds about right
This tore my mother's heart to pieces. What I enjoyed as the sing song quality of a silly lullaby turned so quickly tragic that it left my heart spinning. From promise to torture, that inevitable tire screaming, can't stop in time and not a damn thing you can do about it helplessness that accompanies parenthood. That is potent writing.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Relic

2 Weeks Ago

I'm glad you liked PL, thanks.
I think something you captured very well, maybe without even realizing, is how people will notice your troubles but will only offer judgement rather than help until it is much too late. I love your artistic choices, always adding to the story.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

:) Thank you.
very very sad, it makes me feel many things. I love the way it's organized.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Very sad. Choices always have consequences, as your poem clearly shows. Well done!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

I'm reminded of Chris Cornell in reading your review. You are right. Thanks.
SJ Mullins

6 Months Ago

You're welcome. :)

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Added on August 27, 2012
Last Updated on November 6, 2017
Tags: Baby, teenage, adult, trouble
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I'm a 55 year-old guy whose been playing drums for 40-something years. I use writing as another outlet. You can find me at Cosmofunnel also. more..

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