Wild-child

Wild-child

A Poem by Relic



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Laura girl~Baby-girl~
you're only eight months old~
I hope this crib can hold you in,
You're acting too darn bold!

Laura girl~Child-girl~
what are you up to now?
That riotous mood you're showing off
ain't good for you no-how.

Laura girl~Teenage-girl~
tell me where you've been? 
Hiding out with troubled boys 
Will lead to years of sin. 

Laura girl~Troubled-girl~
no wonder you're in jail~
Ingesting all those harmful drugs 
Has left you sick and frail.

Laura girl~Tragic-girl~
the police were at our door~
That car crash robbed your precious life~
a beer was on the floor!

Laura girl~Silent-girl~
you look like you're asleep
your casket's shine reflects my face
and all I do is weep.

Laura girl~Angel girl~
we're sending you our love~
Our broken hearts can only pray
you're somewhere up above.

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Author's Note

 Relic
Note to self: Poem was revised on 7/27/15.

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A very tragic and haunting tale. Truly heartbreaking and moving piece, Relic.
And you tell it, so beautifully.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 Relic

2 Years Ago

Thanks Roma. :D
The form for this poem is perfect .. A definite heartache of a write .... A beautiful sorrow poetically
Such a sad tale ... Bay

Posted 2 Years Ago


 Relic

2 Years Ago

That's so nice of you to say Bay. As poets we often wonder if what we write touches anyone at all. R.. read more
Wow...Wow...Wow that is all that have to say LOL

Posted 3 Years Ago


 Relic

3 Years Ago

I appreciate that, thanks.
The Black Warrior

3 Years Ago

You're very welcome :D
Holy cow, Tim!!! how have I not seen this one???.... oh my goodness... this is such an intense, raw, powerfully moving piece... What an evolution of a troubled life lost too soon... I love everything about this... the construction, the flow, the rhymes, the wording, the strength and emotions in the words... this is amazing, my friend... It is simple, yet so profound... It really touched me... wow... that's all I can say..

Posted 3 Years Ago


 Relic

3 Years Ago

Well holy cow back at ya. haha, I wrote this eons ago and I can still remember the avatar with it. T.. read more
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

I am serious!!! I didn't like it... I love it!!! one of my favorites of yours... amazing sir.. just .. read more
 Relic

3 Years Ago

Thanks April.
The parents of Laura always love their daughter.
Neglect or lack of parental care might bring ill luck for her.
The same may happen for a son who was not guided properly.
Your epic work may be an eye opener for us all.
We can only pray when an angel dies before growing as a useful person.

Posted 4 Years Ago


 Relic

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much for reading this one and for your wonderful comment Zainul.
zainul

4 Years Ago

You are most welcome,dear poet.
I appreciate your sagacious initiative to educate the childre.. read more
Oh my! It broke my heart and made me cry. This is so tragically gentle and lovely. So happy to find it. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


 Relic

4 Years Ago

Dry your tears my friend, I'm sure she went to heaven. :) Thank you.
Touching, could feel it. Excellent work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


 Relic

5 Years Ago

I appreciate it, thanks.
Beautiful!

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


 Relic

5 Years Ago

Thank you Isaac.
A love for poetry

5 Years Ago

Yes, I have decided to shelve this into my library. I think it is a very important, that each and ev.. read more
 Relic

5 Years Ago

You're right about that, it all starts from the parents at the beginning. Thank you.
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Very powerful! I could feel the crash coming slowly from the start, yet it still stung when it finally hit. Great work!

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Posted 5 Years Ago


 Relic

5 Years Ago

Thank you Q.

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Added on August 27, 2012
Last Updated on November 20, 2017
Tags: Baby, teenage, adult, trouble
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