Yes, I have decided to shelve this into my library. I think it is a very important, that each and ev.. read moreYes, I have decided to shelve this into my library. I think it is a very important, that each and every person should perhaps read this and understand it. A poem like this can save a persons life, perhaps before it even starts, (parents). I think your title is perfect for this poem as well, and just now I thought about children; if they are taught well in the first few years of life, the rest of the journey can be a little easier for them.
Thank you.
11 Years Ago
You're right about that, it all starts from the parents at the beginning. Thank you.
I love the pacing of this poem. Not too quick, but nicely paced so that it doesn't drag along. Also, perhaps it is just me, the pacing has left me feeling uneasy and on edge.... suitable for a poem with a tragic topic such as this. What I like most of all is the span of the poem. Most poems tend to be brief or overlong. This one finds a nice medium in length, especially since it covers the entirety of Laura's life, however brief it was.
I get a feeling of despair, of pity, and of shame out of this. It is sad to see little Laura as a baby, then progress into something, well, ugly. The last three parts are heartbreaking, especially the second to last one, because whatever hope Laura (and the narrator, as well as the readers) had for her is snuffed out. From the ominous warning at the end of the second part to the beginning of the following piece, I wanted to jump in and shield Laura from whatever was coming, to try to set things right. Then, the spiral just suddenly and irreversibly dropped.
All in all, a very emotional and startling piece. However, I wanted to ask about the line: "We're sending you our love?" I am confused about the question mark. Was it intentional, a questioning statement, unsure if you are sending her your love or not?
Thanks so much for the insightful review. It's much appreciated. Despair, pity and shame are certain.. read moreThanks so much for the insightful review. It's much appreciated. Despair, pity and shame are certainly parts of the whole picture behind laura. This poem has been revised several times and Laura herself was originally Katie- bell.
As far as the question mark, That was something I left ambiguous on purpose not knowing if anyone would get it. Laura led a wanton life and of course not everyone in the family would agree with her lifestyle. To me, it shows doubt on the mothers part as to whether everyone in their family really cared for her. You're the only one to mention it. Thanks.
Wow, I could say so much how this relates to many children growing up...now and in the past. A lot of the things we do as we grow is a happening of our surroundings and perception...somehow, without realizing the perception of the child, the parents and surrounding actions of other idles can pose a different response then something you would want... I wish everyone could look into their actions before they act... they're born wild...but the direction they took was skewed..however what ever path they've chosen in their life could have led a direction to save someone else from the same fate...or bring a moment of eureka upon another..
Thanks for your insightful thoughts. Surroundings, influences, and personality types indeed all play.. read moreThanks for your insightful thoughts. Surroundings, influences, and personality types indeed all play a role in what we become.
Like you Sam I take elements from my life's history and try to incorporate them into characters. Obs.. read moreLike you Sam I take elements from my life's history and try to incorporate them into characters. Observation is another tool that helps. Luckily, no one from my family has ever fallen prey to this kind of life but others I know or have seen have.
Unfortunately it's a part of everyday life in somewhere USA. And beyond. Sadly.
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