Meet me in the field of flowers.

Meet me in the field of flowers.

A Poem by Relic
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Infatuation

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The purple violet in your hair 
blooms
like all the days you spoke with a sparkle in your eye.

Fields of wildflowers dance in your presence.
Cool winds turn warm.

Now speak to me, as if the flowers were jealous and listening.  

© 2017 Relic



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Relic
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Aloha relic, this is magical, breathtaking, delicate and everything that speaks adoration though I see the note beneath the title reads infatuation :) I love the way you weaved the moon, wind and flowers and how you bought that to life. The last line is superb. I loved reading this. Mahalo for your fine poetry. Izzy

Posted 6 Months Ago


Wonderful .... tender descriptions .....

Soft and lovely... Great Painting Choice..

Jazzy

Posted 9 Months Ago


I love the vast use of imagery that appeals to the readers senses. This is such a beautiful piece

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you.
Great imagery and beauty limned! A delight to read. Tyfs!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you Cyprian.
Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

You're most welcome.
The imagery is lovely. The comparisons between the beauty of nature and of the fair maiden make both seem more perfect. Such sweet, sweet moments shared between lovers.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much Clifford. :)
The imagery is wonderful. It makes me feel as if I am there watching the whole scene unfold. Exquisite write!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

I appreciate your thoughts, thanks.
SJ Mullins

9 Months Ago

My pleasure. :)
The way you have captured the ethereal, dreamy feelings in of itself paints the romantic vision across the readers minds!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much Michael. :)
you certainly painted a nice image !

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks very much Wordman. :)
 wordman

9 Months Ago

my pleasure relic
Very romantic and description is wonderful

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks very much Barbara. :)
This poem has such a softness to it, almost like blank verse in that the words flow with a steady drumbeat without the accompaniment of rhyme. At the same time, this feels like a rhyming poem because of the euphony; it really lets the words dance and sing in my ears. I really enjoyed the imagery ... it was dream-like and nostalgic in many ways.

The visual presentation is also nice ... the artwork is gorgeous and reflects the poem's theme well. For best appeal, I'd suggest replacing these dashes (--) with this one ( ~ ). The latter dash looks a lot nicer and complements the overall wispy atmosphere of the poem. Also, I'd use a less mundane font choice ... Georgia font size twelve works well with almost anything. (I must mention that my tablet doesn't always correctly display the font, so my last critique may be useless).

- William Liston

Posted 9 Months Ago


Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks very much for the review and suggestions William. As far as the font, that has always been a .. read more

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