Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Paper Fish


Raccoon colored clouds, 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky, 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I mop up memories
and swim away
from a chlorinated sidewalk this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may,
I'm a paper fish
In this city today.




© 2017 Relic



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How ironic that it is Tuesday and Raining where I am. I love this.
Today this rain is a symbol of tears but you have made it a magical scene and still inlaid the sorrow. I have missed reading your thoughts Sweet Buddy

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

You're very kind, thank you Priscilla. :)
Love love love!
This was super fun to read.
Especially "Neon light tassels
lay lucent streaks
reflecting sweet rainbows
on mirrored streets.
the rain from its cage has been released.
were thunder a steak
Could I serve a feast?"
Can't wait to read more of your work.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

Thanks very much Kelly. :)
This puts me in a place. This puts me in Pacific Beach somehow.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

I'm glad, thank you.
Yep, good one Relic. Layout works a treat too. I liked Shannon's interpretation. I just felt like you do on a rainy day in the city, like a sidewalk fish. I'd overlooked the paperness.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

Thank you. :)
How delicate the language movement, a contrast to the bursting colour images that spring forth while reading this piece, well done, good read.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

I thank you for reading. :)
I tend to read things are darker than they are. I see the beauty of the cityscape in a storm. But the paper fish brings to mind something out of place, perhaps fragile.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Relic

5 Months Ago

Precisely. Thank you.
wow...lovely poem.i was smiling the whole time i was reading it.it's just amazing. i'm really glad i joined this site. i'm even more inspired to do better.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

I'm glad to hear that, thank you.
The opening line is a draw as it provokes imagination with its novel concept and the descriptions in metaphor give the impression of a wet, drenched city during a storm. Very expressive and colourful.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Relic

5 Months Ago

Thank you for the reviews.
I really love the imagery behind your words, as well as incorporating parts of nature in your feelings. Fantastic job, great read.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

You're so kind, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Relic,

I put your ideations into the supreme beings lexicon because I'm sure (careful I'm using gender here) He would enjoy the s**t out of them!

regards,
al

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

lol, thanks very much Alfred.

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I'm a 55 year-old guy whose been playing drums for 40-something years. I use writing as another outlet. You can find me at Cosmofunnel also. more..

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