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Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Paper Fish


Raccoon colored clouds, 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky, 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I mop up memories
and swim away
from a chlorinated sidewalk this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may,
I'm a paper fish
In this city today.




© 2017 Relic



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(applauds) I love this poem. Such fantastic detail. :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

I appreciate the read thanks.
I really loved the rhythm you were able to establish

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thank you Alyscia. :)
Wonderful read, very creative imagery and wordplay, fascinating!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

I appreciate the comment Allie, thanks. :)
Wonderful analogy, imagery, words, shall i keep going? You should keep writing, and you should definitely be published! Brilliant!

Posted 6 Months Ago


I switched off a bit when I read this, (I was swimming with the fish...lovely image) but the flow of words and the poetic sounds were like succour to my semi-conscious mind. When I came round with a start,(what, paper fish?) I felt wonderfully refreshed! Good for you!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks very much Aunt Astri. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Interesting imagery here. I especially liked the ending, kinda like acceptance of what we are really..
Nicely penned.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks very much Yumnakay.
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Months Ago

You're welcome, Relic. 😊
You have become quite the seasoned writer. I do believe you've mastered the art of using colorful analogy to describe your thoughts and feelings in the most beautiful way. Surrealism at it's best. And a favorite in my library.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Great Aunt Astri

6 Months Ago

Hey! wait a minute kids! It is LUVLY being old, That is just as long as you don't pretend you are no.. read more
+she plays with matches+

6 Months Ago

who's pretending???
Relic

6 Months Ago

Well, I hope I can have a good attitude when I get older. I see what my dad is going through. I don'.. read more
Hello, Relic! :)
Great imagery and phrasing here. The shift from playful to dreary suggests that you don't like soggy shoes.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Never did. :) Thank you for reading.
Just love it! Great rhythm, flow and imagery. "Sidewalk fish" is so original and, yes, squishy!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thank you very much Annette. :)
Wow..perfection of imagery.. you had me captive from the start....and great Image !! beautiful.
Who knew the city was so color=full !

Jazzy

Posted 6 Months Ago


J. J.  Nightingale

6 Months Ago

YRW.... This may be one of your best !!!!
Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks for saying that Jazzy. :D
J. J.  Nightingale

6 Months Ago

You are welcome.!!

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I'm a 55 year-old guy whose been playing drums for 40-something years. I use writing as another outlet. You can find me at Cosmofunnel also. more..

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