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Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories
and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.




© 2018 Relic



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How delicate the language movement, a contrast to the bursting colour images that spring forth while reading this piece, well done, good read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I thank you for reading. :)
I tend to read things are darker than they are. I see the beauty of the cityscape in a storm. But the paper fish brings to mind something out of place, perhaps fragile.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Relic

1 Year Ago

Precisely. Thank you.
wow...lovely poem.i was smiling the whole time i was reading it.it's just amazing. i'm really glad i joined this site. i'm even more inspired to do better.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I'm glad to hear that, thank you.
The opening line is a draw as it provokes imagination with its novel concept and the descriptions in metaphor give the impression of a wet, drenched city during a storm. Very expressive and colourful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the reviews.
I really love the imagery behind your words, as well as incorporating parts of nature in your feelings. Fantastic job, great read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

You're so kind, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Relic,

I put your ideations into the supreme beings lexicon because I'm sure (careful I'm using gender here) He would enjoy the s**t out of them!

regards,
al

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

lol, thanks very much Alfred.
(applauds) I love this poem. Such fantastic detail. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I appreciate the read thanks.
I really loved the rhythm you were able to establish

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you Alyscia. :)
Wonderful read, very creative imagery and wordplay, fascinating!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I appreciate the comment Allie, thanks. :)
Wonderful analogy, imagery, words, shall i keep going? You should keep writing, and you should definitely be published! Brilliant!

Posted 1 Year Ago



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Added on April 15, 2017
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