Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories
and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.




© 2018 Relic



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Wonderful analogy, imagery, words, shall i keep going? You should keep writing, and you should definitely be published! Brilliant!

Posted 1 Year Ago


I switched off a bit when I read this, (I was swimming with the fish...lovely image) but the flow of words and the poetic sounds were like succour to my semi-conscious mind. When I came round with a start,(what, paper fish?) I felt wonderfully refreshed! Good for you!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much Aunt Astri. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Interesting imagery here. I especially liked the ending, kinda like acceptance of what we are really..
Nicely penned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much Yumnakay.
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You're welcome, Relic. 😊
You have become quite the seasoned writer. I do believe you've mastered the art of using colorful analogy to describe your thoughts and feelings in the most beautiful way. Surrealism at it's best. And a favorite in my library.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Great Aunt Astri

1 Year Ago

Hey! wait a minute kids! It is LUVLY being old, That is just as long as you don't pretend you are no.. read more
Muse

1 Year Ago

who's pretending???
 Relic

1 Year Ago

Well, I hope I can have a good attitude when I get older. I see what my dad is going through. I don'.. read more
Hello, Relic! :)
Great imagery and phrasing here. The shift from playful to dreary suggests that you don't like soggy shoes.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Never did. :) Thank you for reading.
Just love it! Great rhythm, flow and imagery. "Sidewalk fish" is so original and, yes, squishy!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much Annette. :)
Wow..perfection of imagery.. you had me captive from the start....and great Image !! beautiful.
Who knew the city was so color=full !

Jazzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

YRW.... This may be one of your best !!!!
 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks for saying that Jazzy. :D
J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

You are welcome.!!
.. .. 'shoulders splatter. ~ ~ Street puddles boil and gutters clatter, ~~ bullfrogs assert: ~~
what does it matter? .. .. '

Love it - a metamorphic Alice, Magic, High Flying, You and yet more YOU! Seems your world is an upside down dilutable re-creation of this 'chorinated sidewalk' You ARE a paper fish and you love your cerebral wanderings and observations - cos it shows in every line.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Succinctly put Emma. I like you interpretation. Thanks for reading. :)
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

I try, truly do..
Great use of words and playing with imagery. I love how it took me, from each well chosen word to rain soaked images. Love the title, also. Very nice read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for reading. :)
Closed

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.
I whole heartily agree with Duff! I also just really like how this manages to paint both a literal and a metaphorical picture, good job! :D

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I appreciate that Sami, thank you.

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