Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Paper Fish


Raccoon colored clouds, 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky, 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I mop up memories
and swim away
from a chlorinated sidewalk this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may,
I'm a paper fish
In this city today.




© 2017 Relic



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.. .. 'shoulders splatter. ~ ~ Street puddles boil and gutters clatter, ~~ bullfrogs assert: ~~
what does it matter? .. .. '

Love it - a metamorphic Alice, Magic, High Flying, You and yet more YOU! Seems your world is an upside down dilutable re-creation of this 'chorinated sidewalk' You ARE a paper fish and you love your cerebral wanderings and observations - cos it shows in every line.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Succinctly put Emma. I like you interpretation. Thanks for reading. :)
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

I try, truly do..
Great use of words and playing with imagery. I love how it took me, from each well chosen word to rain soaked images. Love the title, also. Very nice read.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks so much for reading. :)
Closed

6 Months Ago

You're welcome.
I whole heartily agree with Duff! I also just really like how this manages to paint both a literal and a metaphorical picture, good job! :D

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

I appreciate that Sami, thank you.
Your imagery is ridiculous. This is vivid and just so many things that are great about poetry. Read it again and its better the second time. Nice work

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks very much.
method

6 Months Ago

You're very welcome
You write poetry as a canvas, magnificent...the scene lures me into a rainy, hazy atmosphere, hard to see my way out and the finale only adds the crushing...brilliant...

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Much appreciated Poppy, thanks. :)
some relic magic here tim, fine entertaining, a write to ponder.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thanks very much andrew.
"near buildings that sit
like sunken ships," perfect imagery, captivating.

Posted 6 Months Ago


Relic

6 Months Ago

Thank you Kitten.
Aloha Relic, amazing moving imagery a very smooth read from start to finish. I love these little fish you paint :) Izzy

Posted 7 Months Ago


Relic

7 Months Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Island Hippy

7 Months Ago

You're welcome
nice stanzas in till 'matter' and 'scatter' nice one thing i want to tell you can make it a song in my next film if you agree

Posted 7 Months Ago


Relic

7 Months Ago

No thanks.
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Gee
Images conjured are vivid, really well written , tripped of the tongue from first word to last letter.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Relic

7 Months Ago

Thank you. tripped of the tongue?
Gee

7 Months Ago

Flowed beautifully...
Relic

7 Months Ago

:) Thanks.

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I'm a 55 year-old guy whose been playing drums for 40-something years. I use writing as another outlet. You can find me at Cosmofunnel also. more..

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