Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories
and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.




© 2018 Relic



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Ah, a place to leave a comment, but the comment isn't for this poem which is wonderful btw, it for the one titled "Thank you" ...which we are unable to say "no, don't go"

Posted 1 Year Ago


Oh you beautiful man with your beautiful mind. Were I smarter than I am I'd give a better review but alas... I am more pretty than brainy. Still I enjoyed this, it is very lyrical and pleasant. Would make a nice tattoo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

haha, pretty than brainy? I doubt that. You are a great writer and one I enjoy. Thank you bro. lol
...................(wOw!).........................

I have no words........my voice is in my awe!!

(I wonder, though, why there's no coda line for Stanza 3....the musicality feels like it needs it. just a small little line like you do at the end of each other stanza- "what does it matter?" or "Can I serve a feast" or "in this city today" . Just wondering. I thoroughly enjoyed everything else about this. Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Never thought to put one in. Thanks for the review.
This piece evoked images/smells/tactile...stuff. I can't think of the words when confronted with such an elegant array!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your review Carol. :)
I really enjoyed this well-written poem..I can see how delicate each line is, how perfectly you have framed everything..I can't find a single fault...
Excellent writing! :))

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for reading and the nice review. :)
Very nice in enjoy reading nice poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you Olympia.
And the picture is beautiful
😍

Posted 1 Year Ago


How ironic that it is Tuesday and Raining where I am. I love this.
Today this rain is a symbol of tears but you have made it a magical scene and still inlaid the sorrow. I have missed reading your thoughts Sweet Buddy

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

You're very kind, thank you Priscilla. :)
Love love love!
This was super fun to read.
Especially "Neon light tassels
lay lucent streaks
reflecting sweet rainbows
on mirrored streets.
the rain from its cage has been released.
were thunder a steak
Could I serve a feast?"
Can't wait to read more of your work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much Kelly. :)
This puts me in a place. This puts me in Pacific Beach somehow.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I'm glad, thank you.

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