Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak, could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose new shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like their sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel, that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.


© 2018 Relic



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Oh I love this! Such vivid imagery and so creative. I like your unique style. The title drew me in. Awesome writing!

Posted 11 Months Ago


 Relic

11 Months Ago

Thanks so much spacey. :)
Kada

11 Months Ago

No Problem.
The imagery of this is amazing! Makes me think of E.E. Cummings mixed with Hart Crane.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much drew, I appreciate the review.
The imagery in this poem is awesome. Building as sunken ships, chlorinated sidewalks and paper fish...simply a pleasure to read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you DIVYA. :)
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

The pleasure is mine. You are welcome. :)
This poem, like your other works that I've had the pleasure of reading, creates the most extraordinary mental images. Well done.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Ah, a place to leave a comment, but the comment isn't for this poem which is wonderful btw, it for the one titled "Thank you" ...which we are unable to say "no, don't go"

Posted 1 Year Ago


Oh you beautiful man with your beautiful mind. Were I smarter than I am I'd give a better review but alas... I am more pretty than brainy. Still I enjoyed this, it is very lyrical and pleasant. Would make a nice tattoo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

haha, pretty than brainy? I doubt that. You are a great writer and one I enjoy. Thank you bro. lol
...................(wOw!).........................

I have no words........my voice is in my awe!!

(I wonder, though, why there's no coda line for Stanza 3....the musicality feels like it needs it. just a small little line like you do at the end of each other stanza- "what does it matter?" or "Can I serve a feast" or "in this city today" . Just wondering. I thoroughly enjoyed everything else about this. Well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Never thought to put one in. Thanks for the review.
This piece evoked images/smells/tactile...stuff. I can't think of the words when confronted with such an elegant array!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks for your review Carol. :)
I really enjoyed this well-written poem..I can see how delicate each line is, how perfectly you have framed everything..I can't find a single fault...
Excellent writing! :))

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for reading and the nice review. :)
Very nice in enjoy reading nice poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you Olympia.

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