Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak, could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose new shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like their sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel, that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.


© 2018 Relic



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And the picture is beautiful
😍

Posted 1 Year Ago


How ironic that it is Tuesday and Raining where I am. I love this.
Today this rain is a symbol of tears but you have made it a magical scene and still inlaid the sorrow. I have missed reading your thoughts Sweet Buddy

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

You're very kind, thank you Priscilla. :)
Love love love!
This was super fun to read.
Especially "Neon light tassels
lay lucent streaks
reflecting sweet rainbows
on mirrored streets.
the rain from its cage has been released.
were thunder a steak
Could I serve a feast?"
Can't wait to read more of your work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much Kelly. :)
This puts me in a place. This puts me in Pacific Beach somehow.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I'm glad, thank you.
Yep, good one Relic. Layout works a treat too. I liked Shannon's interpretation. I just felt like you do on a rainy day in the city, like a sidewalk fish. I'd overlooked the paperness.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you. :)
How delicate the language movement, a contrast to the bursting colour images that spring forth while reading this piece, well done, good read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I thank you for reading. :)
I tend to read things are darker than they are. I see the beauty of the cityscape in a storm. But the paper fish brings to mind something out of place, perhaps fragile.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 Relic

1 Year Ago

Precisely. Thank you.
wow...lovely poem.i was smiling the whole time i was reading it.it's just amazing. i'm really glad i joined this site. i'm even more inspired to do better.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I'm glad to hear that, thank you.
The opening line is a draw as it provokes imagination with its novel concept and the descriptions in metaphor give the impression of a wet, drenched city during a storm. Very expressive and colourful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the reviews.
I really love the imagery behind your words, as well as incorporating parts of nature in your feelings. Fantastic job, great read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

You're so kind, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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