Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak, could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose new shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like their sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel, that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.


© 2018 Relic



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Wow..perfection of imagery.. you had me captive from the start....and great Image !! beautiful.
Who knew the city was so color=full !

Jazzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

YRW.... This may be one of your best !!!!
 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks for saying that Jazzy. :D
J. J.  Nightingale

1 Year Ago

You are welcome.!!
.. .. 'shoulders splatter. ~ ~ Street puddles boil and gutters clatter, ~~ bullfrogs assert: ~~
what does it matter? .. .. '

Love it - a metamorphic Alice, Magic, High Flying, You and yet more YOU! Seems your world is an upside down dilutable re-creation of this 'chorinated sidewalk' You ARE a paper fish and you love your cerebral wanderings and observations - cos it shows in every line.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Succinctly put Emma. I like you interpretation. Thanks for reading. :)
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

I try, truly do..
Great use of words and playing with imagery. I love how it took me, from each well chosen word to rain soaked images. Love the title, also. Very nice read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much for reading. :)
Closed

1 Year Ago

You're welcome.
I whole heartily agree with Duff! I also just really like how this manages to paint both a literal and a metaphorical picture, good job! :D

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

I appreciate that Sami, thank you.
Your imagery is ridiculous. This is vivid and just so many things that are great about poetry. Read it again and its better the second time. Nice work

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much.
duff

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome
You write poetry as a canvas, magnificent...the scene lures me into a rainy, hazy atmosphere, hard to see my way out and the finale only adds the crushing...brilliant...

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Much appreciated Poppy, thanks. :)
some relic magic here tim, fine entertaining, a write to ponder.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much andrew.
"near buildings that sit
like sunken ships," perfect imagery, captivating.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you Kitten.
Aloha Relic, amazing moving imagery a very smooth read from start to finish. I love these little fish you paint :) Izzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Island Hippy

1 Year Ago

You're welcome
nice stanzas in till 'matter' and 'scatter' nice one thing i want to tell you can make it a song in my next film if you agree

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

No thanks.

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