Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Metallic colored clouds; 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky; 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit like sunken ships.

So I'll mop up memories
and swim away
from the chlorinated sidewalks this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may, 
I'm a paper fish in this city today.




© 2018 Relic



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Your imagery is ridiculous. This is vivid and just so many things that are great about poetry. Read it again and its better the second time. Nice work

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much.
duff

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome
You write poetry as a canvas, magnificent...the scene lures me into a rainy, hazy atmosphere, hard to see my way out and the finale only adds the crushing...brilliant...

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Much appreciated Poppy, thanks. :)
some relic magic here tim, fine entertaining, a write to ponder.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks very much andrew.
"near buildings that sit
like sunken ships," perfect imagery, captivating.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you Kitten.
Aloha Relic, amazing moving imagery a very smooth read from start to finish. I love these little fish you paint :) Izzy

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Island Hippy

1 Year Ago

You're welcome
nice stanzas in till 'matter' and 'scatter' nice one thing i want to tell you can make it a song in my next film if you agree

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

No thanks.
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Gee
Images conjured are vivid, really well written , tripped of the tongue from first word to last letter.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thank you. tripped of the tongue?
Gee

1 Year Ago

Flowed beautifully...
 Relic

1 Year Ago

:) Thanks.
You really threw up some amazing images with your words here Relic, like a kaleidoscope, ever changing from one scene to the next, flashing images of the insanity that surrounds us but we rarely question. The last line really lingers, leaving me with the thought of wondering if a paper fish would be happier or sadder out of water.
I think I'll need to start calling such days paper fish days, when we see but can't quite believe what we are seeing around us, and the confusion that others see it too, but act like it is normal. Personally, I think we are all paper fish, pretending we are something more important.
Superb piece of writing. Very thought provoking.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Good review, thanks so much. :)
What a charming read. It skips along throwing up some gorgeous little images in a a light rhyme sauce. I like the little fish. It seems a good way to be.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

Thanks so much R J.
Oh - I like this - a great read down the page and smooth, so smooth. Funny you mention Bullforgs and I mention toads - must be the day for these amphibians.

You paint lovely pictures my fish friend, I do hope you find a drain to take you to a river or sumfin X

Posted 1 Year Ago


 Relic

1 Year Ago

LOL, thank you KWP.

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