Taming the clouds of lonesomeness

When I'd found 

the warmth of your waist replaced

            by sunrise ribbons

                                      on the bed 

I felt no more alive 

              than cut grass 

                       pushed aside 

                                          by daisies...

My color 

      had drained

rains of worry 

                 fell untamed.

But for you 

      I'd rope the moon

             or lasso long sunsets.

I'd break the clouds of loneliness 

                      to saddle

                                   joyful bliss.

Content to know 

        I'd tied the reins

              of love around your heart.

Willing to ride

             the extra mile

                          it takes to get you home. 

Author's Note

Inspired by the little picture. (you can click on it).

Reviews

[Ruth]

Wow, this is stunning, the effortless flow of emotion and heartfelt sentiments are really emotively woven...the longing and yearning and emptiness are palpable and the beauty shining through the in-betweens is far reaching...wonderful piece!

[Relic]

Thank very much Poppy. :)

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

If I were seeking to woo a woman's heart, this is a poem that I would sure as hell recite to her beneath the full moon, having memorized each line in anticipation of melting her heart ... Beautifully done ...

[Relic]

You're so kind, thank you Marvin.

[Dave]

How wonderful to ignore the unwanted heartaches and to replace them with the promise of love without limits.

I really enjoyed this write.

[Relic]

Thank you very much.

[Raven Moonchild]

(applauds) This poem is beautiful!!! :)

[Relic]

Thank you very much. :)

[Raven Moonchild]

No,thank you for sharing your poetic mind with unworthy eyes,my friend. :)

[William Liston]

Breathtaking. Though I find your use of idented lines a bit redundant, I think the overall stylistic choices, with the punctuation and stanza-length consistent throughout, fit the nuances of the poem. I also like how the metaphors are elegant and a bit over-the-top without making the speaker sound overly dramatic. There's a strong atmosphere of longing and lonliness conveyed in the first stanza that seamlessly progresses throughout. The "waist replaced by sunrise ribbons" description, for both its euphonic sound and uniqueness, was my favorite. Excellent work.

- William Liston

[Relic]

Thank you William. The indents are just something different for a change.

[Lorry]

Superb. This reminds me of a myspace group from the long long ago, called flexwriters, who used to have different challenges each day, with the weekend one always being picture challenges. I loved reading all the different angles people came from and you have manages to capture perfectly the untamed theme, with doing anything in your power for the one you love. Excellent.

[Relic]

Thanks very much for your thoughts N. :)

[wordman]

you painted lovely images relic,liked the photo

[Relic]

Thank you Wordman. :)

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Wow! I think there's a song here. Most exquisite imagery and eloquent words. The artwork is amazing. You are very talented for sure!

[Relic]

I appreciate that Annette, thank you.

I'll be looking at some of your work tomorrow. :)

[SJ Mullins]

Wonderful imagery. Beautifully written. You are one hell of a writer, darlin'. Please don't close down your profile again!

[Windah]

I enjoy this. Thank you for sharing. You are an amazing writer.

[Relic]

Thank you very much. :)