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I will plant daffodils here if you want.

I will plant daffodils here if you want.

A Poem by Relic

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 I'll plant these daffodils here by your grave.
And when they've grown 
and blossomed with life; 
when sunlight from a penny-colored sun
feeds them,
I'll see them exist,
cheerful in yellow smiles and stiff collars.

But I'll feel no delight 
nor contentment.
Nor will I happily float away as fulfilled 
as a hummingbird or bee.

I'll plod away instead, 
never expecting messages from the dead,
while holding a perpetual resentment at God
for keeping resurrection to himself. 




© 2018 Relic



Author's Note

 Relic
Some wounds never heal. :(

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You are absolutely right.. some wounds never seem to heal, but what you have achieved here is nothing short of what Lyn has written in her earlier review... These words of yours and under the circumstances, are darn near perfect.. and true........... Neville

Posted 4 Days Ago


 Relic

4 Days Ago

Thanks very much, Neville.
Neville Pettitt

4 Days Ago

my sincere pleasure..
This is a beautiful, heart wrenching piece. The pain is so intense -- its presentation is flawless, in my opinion, to give it the full weight of the anger and grief. The ending is so true. Immense loss breeds resentment, especially where God is concerned.

Posted 1 Month Ago


 Relic

1 Month Ago

Thank you, Lyn.
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Dee
Like you said death is a wound, that never heals, it just forever. And the emotions of that moment. Never leaves you fully.

Posted 1 Month Ago


 Relic

1 Month Ago

Thanks for the review.
Dee

1 Month Ago

No, thank you for making us think and ponder.
This is so beautiful and so poignant...and heartbreaking too. I am an atheist and i feel that although atheism is better than being a religious fanatic in many ways, the concept of death seems so final, so ultimate from an atheist's point of view.
When my grandma died some months back, i was completely shattered, and i had no one to turn to, the way my religious family could turn to their gods. They could imagine a future for my grandma in heaven, could console their hearts that she was there somewhere. It is heartbreaking to know that you will never be able to see your loved one ever again...that they have so impossibly gone away, and no one can really offer more than their condolences.
I do believe, that even though death is so ultimate, our loved ones are around us as energy. The energy that was in their body went to the universe and is still around us in living forms, in daffodils, in the grass, in the molecules of air around us. The energy is diminished into thousands of living things, but it still remains. Thermodynamics states that no energy is ever lost. Even us, we have been so deeply touched by them, that they remain incorporated in our memories always. If that isn't afterlife, i don't know what is.

Posted 1 Month Ago


 Relic

1 Month Ago

So well said, thank you.
Beautiful imagery, but I picked up on dreadful feelings of loss, unhealing, and the resentment of your love being taken from you by an unkind God. I don't believe in messages from the dead, but I still have an open ear anyway. Your poem made me feel tearful. That's the effect that good poetry can have. It stirs up the emotions.

Posted 3 Months Ago


 Relic

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your review, Christine. :)
Christine Anne Shaw

3 Months Ago

You are welcome.
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Month Ago

Had the opportunity of reading this lovely poem for a second time. It is so beautifully expressed. T.. read more
Some things in this life leave the most unimaginable scars. The pain reverberates in the soul evermore. The pain and poignancy are palpable.

Posted 4 Months Ago


 Relic

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts, Linda.
Yes, many wounds never do. We just go on. And on. Your Vivid, personal, emotional words and imagery describe a life-changing loss and a heart still torn. The lovely, natural imagery in the first eloquent verse, is offset by the melancholy and grief expressed in the agony expressed in the title and last two verses. Words bleed to water the daffodils and give them life, while a mourned life lies beneath them. Wishing you peace and healing my friend. Brilliant write!

Posted 4 Months Ago


 Relic

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Annette.
This poignant writing is heartbreakingly beautiful. Tugs at the hearts of your readers. I agree with you some wounds never heal.

Posted 4 Months Ago


 Relic

4 Months Ago

Thank you Mrudula.
Mrudula Rani

4 Months Ago

You are most welcome.
This was heartbreaking. I shed a few tears while I read the last stanza. It was lovely, truly lovely to read.

Posted 5 Months Ago


 Relic

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much for reading.
No, it is a horrible thing, death, isn't it? You would see people die, and then see yourself die, your last moments either alone, or with people, sparks of shock everywhere. It's horrible, and this poem is so relatable to, its rather eerie in a way. I've never been to somebody's grave, but I had the opportunity to, but my mother turned it down when my great aunt, Diana, died. in mid 2010s. It was so sad, me and my sister couldn't stop thinking about her, we were terrified. If this is a true story, then I feel so sorry for you, I hope you will overcome this, even though the chances are unlikely. 'Til this day, do I remember Diana? Yes, but do I remember her face? With minor details, yes, but those minor memories of her appearance sink away from my mind, forgotten and replaced with some new memories, unfortunately. The times we had, years before she died, were rather memorable and still are.

Posted 5 Months Ago


 Relic

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your moving words, Zak.
ZakLeonRamsey

5 Months Ago

No problem, keep your writing up because I like it.
 Relic

5 Months Ago

Thanks, I'll try.

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