STOP SAYING IT SUCKS!!!!! This so does not suck...you may not see it now but you have a real gift and such a voice that could help many people one day. You have a gift and a lot of talent which I believe will take you very far in the world. Keep writing and try to believe especially in yourself...
Oh, I'm sure a few more editing can make this better, at least enough to make you proud of it. I think what it lacks is the proper building of emotions. And by proper, I mean gradual. I suggest you elaborate more on the frenzy of emotions when parents lose their child, and are unaware if the child is still alive. Still, judging it as it is, I think the way you wrote it is good. The rhyming of words is good. I see you've maintained it all throughout the piece. Also, I like how you developed it from start to end. It started out with them crying and ended with them asking for closure. Anyway, even if you say it sucks, I say it's something you should be proud of. It's still a work of art, something that expresses feelings under such circumstances, and more so than that, something that reflects a part of yourself as its writer. Well, Good Job.
Samantha, Madison, Jessica, Chet and Sasha are my best friends in the world, I trust them like the world, and know that they would back me up, and defend me if I needed them. So I'm taking this time t.. more..