Kaleidoscope

 

 

Let us go now

You and I

Across the chaotic void

That I call my thoughts.

Closed off

And grasping for air

I wait.

Alwaya vigil,

Always silent,

Quietly alone.

 

Leaning against my heart.

My reason for living

Fighting the darkness as best as I can

And as it tries to steal my light

I wait,

Quietly alone.

 

Here I lie

As my troubles

Surround and overwhelm me

Threatining to destroy

What I sought to build

Putting everything away

At an arms distance

I wait,

Quietly alone.

 

I'm grasping at straws

To see reason

With open eyes

To find I am blind

In this oblivion

Where everything is so plainly

Within my sight

So I wait,

Quietly alone.

 

Pulling moments

From my memory

As they blur together

In familiar shapes.

Unfinished sentences

And unwritten lines

Cascade downhill

As I wait,

Quietly alone.

 

The lines I draw

Become more complex

As they began to fold

Upon themselves

Losing all will and reason...

Purpose.

Baffled, I wait.

Quietly alone.

 

Coloring with crayons

i try to find the color

That potrays the depth

Of your chaos...

I am lost in it.

A firery bliss

I beheld.

Gaping at the darkiness I found

Within my light.

Trying to smolder the flames

I wait.

Quietly alone.

 

The clock is ticking down

The minutes

And I love you more each day

That it hurts to be away.

But I wait

Quietly alone

 

Closed off and grasping for air

I wait.

Afraid to be anything more...

Ashamed to be anything less.

Pretending to be ok

While trying to pull you from your

Dark fate.

I fight and struggle

Not wanting

Not needing

Contained and neat

I wait.

Ready to burst.

Quitely alone.

 

My thoughts meander

As sure as the sky is azure

And your heart is mine.

And I wait

Wasting the time

By writting of you

Quietly alone.

 

Jaded and controled

I can't bring myself

To finish it.

I don't know how.

I'm not sure that I wish it over...

So much left unsaid.

I lose daylight quickly

Impatient and wanting

I reach for you

Needing and open

No longer as bling as before

Fracturing and cascading downhill

Smoldering complex lines

In a bar of 5/8

While shadows cover our fate

And it all falls away.

Leaving my life in your hands

My fate and yours forever entertwined

And everchanging.

Still I wait.

 

Undeterred and defiant

I stand before you.

My screams falling upon

Unhearing ears.

You're all talk

But you never listen.

And still I wait...

 

For the day I won't have to be

Quietly alone

Softly weeping on the inside

So self sufficient

And emotionally restrained

That I might implode

With all the unspoken thoughts

Hidden inside.

And It all becomes undone

As I let go

And learn to fall into

Open arms

No longer waiting to be

Free.

No longer waiting to be

Understood.

So now we fall away.

 

Let us go now

You and I

To the uncharted territories

Of the others' mind

 

And let it all fall away

And I wait

Silently, quietly, never alone

And let it all fall away.

 

Author's Note

my ending could've been stronger...

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

A very powerful poem. Your ending could of been stronger...maybe? Everything flowed for me. As a writer I am sure you can see changes that are needed in your work. Until you pointed it out I am not really sure we would of felt that way because of the power you presented throughout the piece. Great poem thanks for sharing!

[Jetta Zippora]

Breathtaking write! I love your style and the words you used in this, and I can't wait to read more of your stuff...
Kudos, friend! :)

[Kristina Moulaison]

I actually really, really liked the end. I thought it was just right how it landed there like so much emotional turmoil does. It contains a soft exhale, a release after so much spinning, which is quite lovely and very appropriate. Nicely done.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

I liked this piece in it's entirety.. going from waiting alone.. to never alone.. the flow was amazing and I could relate in so many ways to this piece!

Let us go now
You and I
To the uncharted territories
Of the others' mind

And let it all fall away
And I wait
Silently, quietly, never alone
And let it all fall away.

An invitation of sorts to not have to ever be alone again.. how divine!!! Hopefully the invitation is taken by the other party so that each has someone to never have to feel alone again... loved the message this portrayed!!!

[amailleia]

I agree the ending could have been a bit more focused, yet the trailing off and return to your original stanza made this a carefully structured piece that really touched me. I likey^^

[Constance L. Hartwell]

I agree, your ending could have been stronger as long as you realize that. Admitting such a thing will make you a better writer. Anywho, I really enjoyed reading this poem and I liked how you kept repeating "quietly alone." It was unique. Kudos

[Cherry Berry]

I loved these lines....

Undeterred and defiant
I stand before you.
My screams falling upon
Unhearing ears.
You're all talk
But you never listen.
And still I wait...

I enjoyed reading. This piece was very well penned.
xox
Cherri