Vow To A Dying Flower

A piece on saving a loved one.

Black rose,
Growing amongst deadly shadows.
Your seed laced from the start with hate.

I see you ,
Feeling for the first time that I’ve seen something real.
You radiate life,
And I yearn to touch your secret heart.
To hold the shattered remains of your core,
Wondering if I might piece it back together.

Would you let me?
Dying flower,
I could be the one to save you.

Your anger is pulsing,
Sick spills of memories long past drip through inebriated lips.
They kill the deepest part of me,
Until I know what true loathing is.
And I bow to the sensation,
Vowing in silence to grant your unspoken cry.

You want to be whole,
Not again,
But for the very first time.

Author's Note

This is an older piece of writing. I just found a few that I thought I'd readd to this page.

Reviews

[Rambling Prose]

A a beautifully written piece of poetry. The title couldn't be more fitting. Your word choices painted a picturesque landscape, gently guiding my mind's eye on a delightful journey through the whimsical.

I love this style of writing a great deal. I truly aspire to write in such a fashion, one day; hopefully soon!

A lovely write...

[Barbara Walker]

I see this as the self trying to heal self, from wounds received over years and years. But it's a hopeful poem as in "vowing in silence to grant your unspoken cry", but that's the optimist in me, too! I think this is an excellent poem. It causes you to think, but it's not so obscure that one is lost reading it. Barbara

[MerelyPoetic]

Oh my god, this is utterly beautiful. I almost stopped reading once I saw it wasn't about a flower, because I'm trying to fight the depression today.... but your words are so relevant to a relationship I am currently in. I couldn't stop reading once I started and I could feel the vibrations of those deep emotions coming right off the screen.

Black rose,
Growing amongst deadly shadows.
Your seed laced from the start with hate.

[Karen James]

Powerful piece

You have a good use of form and great use of words.

The message imparted follows the ambient feel the words have instilled.

This is a good read.

[zig]

i guess i just have a thing for the darker poetry, really enjoyed this, great descriptions. judgeing from the two poems i read, your writing has strong individual voice... i like that too. great job on this, old poem or not. zig