Trains
A Poem by
John Ryan
Climb on top of a runaway train
Sprint all day and night
Just to see that Beauty again
Pushing through and through
Aching bones and sweat in my eyes
But its still just so far away
Always a long way gone
Cold wind bites the skin
Don`t know what state I`m in
Who are you trying to be
Where are you trying to go
Riding atop wild runaway trains Hitchhiking out of the jungle of my mind
Just to get out of this mess
Just to see her again
Pushing forward through the night
Tired bones protecting a broken spirit
Following a lost cause
Chasing a broken Dream Yet, I keep pushing forward Because this is all I have
© 2014 John Ryan
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Posted 9 Years Ago
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Love the sounds of the steam engines. Valentine
Posted 7 Years Ago
Love the sounds of the steam engines. Valentine
i love this poem !! such a lovely piece of work filled with beauty
well done
Posted 8 Years Ago
i love this poem !! such a lovely piece of work filled with beauty
well done
8 Years Ago
Thank you very much
I like the flip in meaning in this poem, but it get a bit vague what you are talking about, but otherwise I like it. Good job!
Posted 9 Years Ago
I like the flip in meaning in this poem, but it get a bit vague what you are talking about, but otherwise I like it. Good job!
"Following a lost cause
Chasing a broken Dream
Yet, I keep pushing forward
Because this is all I have"
Love the last lines, it talks about not giving up and still pushing no matter the odds.
Posted 9 Years Ago
"Following a lost cause
Chasing a broken Dream
Yet, I keep pushing forward
Because this is all I have"
Love the last lines, it talks about not giving up and still pushing no matter the odds.
Congratulations!
This piece is a finalist for Promote Me! VI (Peace).
As your reward I have sent 115 read requests on your behalf.
Voting is open until 10/15/14.
http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Promote-Me%21-VI-%28Peace%29/50367/
Good luck and keep writing!
Posted 9 Years Ago
Congratulations!
This piece is a finalist for Promote Me! VI (Peace).
As your reward I have sent 115 read requests on your behalf.
Voting is open until 10/15/14.
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Good luck and keep writing!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
this brought back memories, back in the day I was a rail tramp, riding the rails I wrote a piece a long the same lines called (FLY BYE) as I read your work I could see you've done the same thing. happy trails.
Excellent write.
Posted 9 Years Ago
this brought back memories, back in the day I was a rail tramp, riding the rails I wrote a piece a long the same lines called (FLY BYE) as I read your work I could see you've done the same thing. happy trails.
Excellent write.
I could not quite grasp the message or the theme in this piece. Also, something I recently learned is that just like any other, piece of writing poetry should have punctuation too. There was a bit of inconsistency in the phrases that were confusing and seemed out of place. I do, however believe that this piece is very beautifully written and has an emotion that is easy to feel. Certain parts inspired an emotional reaction and that is a great asset in poetry. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!
Posted 9 Years Ago
I could not quite grasp the message or the theme in this piece. Also, something I recently learned is that just like any other, piece of writing poetry should have punctuation too. There was a bit of inconsistency in the phrases that were confusing and seemed out of place. I do, however believe that this piece is very beautifully written and has an emotion that is easy to feel. Certain parts inspired an emotional reaction and that is a great asset in poetry. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work!
Yet, I keep pushing forward
Because this is all I have
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the ending yet puts hope in this narrative...questions and answers for there more to be found...the relay in the way this unfolds makes one thing in a perspective...a related topic one can view for themselves...
Posted 9 Years Ago
Yet, I keep pushing forward
Because this is all I have
---
the ending yet puts hope in this narrative...questions and answers for there more to be found...the relay in the way this unfolds makes one thing in a perspective...a related topic one can view for themselves...
I like it! I traveled over 40,000 miles on freight trains in my teenage years and I can relate. Sometimes life still feels like a runaway train. Thanks for writing this.
Posted 9 Years Ago
I like it! I traveled over 40,000 miles on freight trains in my teenage years and I can relate. Sometimes life still feels like a runaway train. Thanks for writing this.
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