Colorblind

Black and white rainbow The colors drained away Like tears of fallen snow Colored with crayons It's a colorblind world Until I see you Like an arrow you were hurled  Into my line of sight You color my rainbow bright And take my blindness away And it's like Heaven's light Falls upon my view Keep me in color Stay with me forever Like Heaven's brother So my eyes will never die

Reviews

[TeenRomance2]

Very sweet :-)

[.SaveSydney!.]

I really like this!!
It's great at showing the way of how one person, one thing, can show us a whole new perspective on life..
Great job! :D

[Bard Constantine]

Nice job with this write, you create some outstanding creative phrases here. The only one I'd question is 'uncoiled snake from curled'... it sound a bit clumsy, and could probably be phrased better. Just an opinion, of course. Keep up the fine work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Such life and spirit in your words. I like the strength in each line and the flow of the poem. The colors we need to keep our eyes and mind alive to the beauty around us. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Onyx_Rayne]

Your words paint an amazing visual picture.

"It's a colorblind world
Until I see you
Uncoiled snake from curled
Step into my line of sight" - Fantastic!

Keep writing - you have talent :)

[KaySea]

love it love the last stanza

[Daydreamer54]

Beautiful poem here! I love the first stanza!

[jose]

this poem is awesome very very good . I love this poem

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wow-this is such a surreal-ethereal write-
a wonderfully expressive piece of poetry...:-)

...I Love it...

james:-)