EMPATHY

EMPATHY

A Story by Imorbid
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As Mary left work early, the red sun grew larger and brighter. Tom, who had taken the day off from work, was already mixing drinks and setting up lawn chairs on the roof.

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As Mary left work early, the red sun grew larger and brighter. Tom, who had taken the day off from work, was already mixing drinks and setting up lawn chairs on the roof. The moment Mary arrived, he thrust a drink into her hand.

“Tom, remember the first time we met?”

“Of course, you were working on that terraforming rig. And I was there performing a safety inspection. That day you looked very hot in that tight green jumpsuit and red hair.”

“Well not as hot as I am today.” She laughs.

Thousands of drones fly overhead recording and televising to the non-existent.

“It won’t be long now Mary. You don’t get to see this every day.”

“Tom, I have something to tell you.”

Their robotic eyes darken to block out the red giant's increasing luminosity.

“What is it, Mary?”

“What I’m trying to say is, I don’t love you, Tom.”

“Why are you telling me this now?” Tom sounding confused.

The temperature climbs, bleeding the atmosphere from the planet.

“Remember we promised to have those empathy chips installed. Well I lied, I never did.”

“Well Mary, that makes two of us.”

Engulfed in flames Mars vanishes.

© 2017 Imorbid



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And I'm laughing...and laughing...who's the "dirty dog" here? And wait...why only her?

This is what I call a "slice of life" piece. Compact, concise and complete. It needs no lengthy dialogue, or extensive descriptions because the ones so skillfully inserted, are sufficient. It's a talent and a skill I very much admire.

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This is certainly a different kind of "last moments" story. Missing empathy chips--I think there must be a shortage of those. Very good writing, my friend.

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Imorbid

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
And I'm laughing...and laughing...who's the "dirty dog" here? And wait...why only her?

This is what I call a "slice of life" piece. Compact, concise and complete. It needs no lengthy dialogue, or extensive descriptions because the ones so skillfully inserted, are sufficient. It's a talent and a skill I very much admire.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so sad, I can totally put myself in Tom's shoes, though I feel this story could of been expanded, but you've done a good jb and got me hooked to your plot.

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Imorbid

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much. You know how it is, trying to write a little something every day.
Celt of the Redland Realm

2 Months Ago

Yeah, tell me about it, if it's not writer's block its always some un called for external distractio.. read more
Imorbid

2 Months Ago

And to make matters worse, I'm impatient, so constantly reworking a piece drives me nuts lol
Huh, interesting but I like it!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imorbid

2 Months Ago

Thank you!

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Imorbid
Imorbid

Kearny , NJ



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