Don't Go

Someone I love very much is moving far away...

My fingers stiffen as I try to pull them away,
My heart races against the ending day.
Can we just stay her a minute?
Please don't pull the trigger and release the bullet.

I haven't said what I need to say.
I'm not finished here.
So please...just stay.


Don't go, the words tear from me,
My voice breaks and hot tears blind me so I can't see.
When you go you'll take the best of me,
When you go...there will be nothing left of me.

I don't know how to watch you disappear,
You walking away has been my biggest fear.
How am I supposed to live without you?
For all this time you've been all I've had.
Just us, just two.

So you pull away and break my fingers,
Limp they lay bleeding with piercing splinters.
You leave me crumpled on the floor,
On bleeding knees staring at the closing door

And all I can say through aching sobs is this...
Please don't forget me, that somewhere I exist.

Reviews

[Levi Levin]

Very carefully penned indeed and thought provocative. Great job Jess!

[B. Boileau]

Emotional work . You express feelings felt by the reader of true love lost. I like the smooth rythm. You appear to wear your heart on the sleeve you write with. I read it as " can we just stay here a minute "
thanks for sharing
bill

[MAC]

a very emotional piece, written with great style. on a personal note-the hell with that person, we are worth more then anybody that comes into ours lives. am very glad to have read you!

[MomzillaNC]

An emotionally charged poem of losing love. I hope this only hyperbole for effect:

"So you pull away and break my fingers,
Limp they lay bleeding with piercing splinters.
You leave me crumpled on the floor,
On bleeding knees staring at the closing door”

[Jessi]

Truly only a hyperbole. :) It was written in an hour of intense grief. Thank you for your comment.

[MomzillaNC]

I’m glad it’s only hyperbole and yvw.

[dan]

Jessi, This is a very emotionally powerful piece. The phrase, "...wearing your heart on your sleeve" comes to mind. It's a very difficult ordeal when a loved one relocates to a distant place, the heart gets torn and squeezed bone dry. You've described the process very realistically, which is often very hard to do if you are sharing those thoughts with others. Very well done! take care...dan

[Jessi]

Dan, your review is so kind. Thank you.

[Dandelion]

Heavy with emotion. Such a difficult thing. :-(
Your words really touch the heart.

[Jessi]

Thank you so much!

[Prantik Ali]

Full of emotion. U portrayed your love so brilliantly. Heart warming!!! :) :) :)

[Inject Positivity]

May God bring two of you together again....Greatly written and the poem has melancholic tone which touches the reader.......I hope your sister comes back to you soon and fill your heart.....God bless you....

[Ritu Srivastav Sharan]

Expained your emotions with words.....nice lines....

[Ammar Ali]

Ending is perfect thumbs up