Killer Feeling~ (poem)

Just a really short poem, I've got to say this is kinda my first xD

I thought this feeling was done,well pushed aside, erased,gone. But I guess it has been keeping track, and now it has returned to stab me in the back.It takes out a knife ,sharp as hell,and as it brings it down to take my life. I can already tell,Tomorrow they'll find me dead.

- IfThisIsLove_IDontWantToBeLoved

Author's Note

What did you think? Criticism welcome!

Reviews

[Prince Pyro]

Short and to the point is what comes to my mind immediately. I liked how you delivered it but for some reason it gave me the idea of using this line in a story I am working on... Hope you wouldn't mind if I do use it.

[IfThisIsLove_IDontWantToBeLoved]

Not at all! Go ahead! c: but tell me what your story is called when you're finished, I want to read it ^.^

[Prince Pyro]

I always decide on the title at the end of the story and it's far from over at the moment but will finish when I get the chance. I will let you know when I do. :)

[IfThisIsLove_IDontWantToBeLoved]

Thanks! c:

[FlatLineBeauty]

I think you did a good way to describe the damage of being back stabbed. The people that back stab you aren't worth the s**t on the bottom of your shoes as much as it hurts. Hope they don't find you dead. You seem pretty awesome. xo Winter

[IfThisIsLove_IDontWantToBeLoved]

Haha I was laughing so hard ( I don't know cussing gets me going xD ) but Thank You! c: you seem pretty awesome too!

[FlatLineBeauty]

Haha, yw. glad I could make you laugh.

[IfThisIsLove_IDontWantToBeLoved]

Sure xD my pleasure!

[IfThisIsLove_IDontWantT..]

Thank you! Yes, it is short xD Yes, you totally got what I was trying to explain. I actually wrote this during my last break up, helps get feelings out.

[I Am Svetlana]

I think this was interesting and well done. Though it is short, it tells a story, gets your point across. You put good emotion into this and it sucks to know that certain feelings are able to find away to creep themselves back into your life when you feel completely fine, as if they have disappeared.