The River

"Oh God I need it
I was wrong again
Take me to the river
And make me clean again"
-Manchester Orchestra

I'm the coward hiding deep inside a cave
Far away from where I came
Farther away from where I started
I'm the coward you've grown to hate

I'm the heart that continually grows
It's the shining sun on a mountain of snow
And yet it fakes its wretched brokenness
I'm the heart you think you know

I'm the mind that thinks it's wise
It can't see past you and I
Because I've misplaced it somewhere in this river
This river was overflowing and sublime
Of all the things needed for this life
But I took a turn far from the river
And once I left this River of Life
I seemed to have lost my mind

I'm the liar on your shoulder
Speaking words of destruction and vulgar
I say I'm decided when choice comes near
When really, all I know is to run from fear

I'm the soul who's lost at sea
I was on the boat, but I'm now so far out of reach
The water was much too deep
To take a stand on my own two feet
For living is not just the breath we breathe,
It's what we make the air to be.
Is it toxic, or is it sweet?
I left that answer at the river,
At the river I left ME.

Author's Note

This is the art of losing yourself. This river of life is the beauty and hope you have with God, and the farther you drift, the more you lose who you truly are. Atleast, in my case that is.

Reviews

[OT]

very nice - the river of life is one we can all find ourselves lost in - you captured that well here - and also the rhyme scheme was nicely done too!! well done - just one tiny thing - "I've seemed to have lost my mind" - change the "I've" to just "I" and perfect! nice!

[kaylynnmelody♥]

such an interesting write. thank you for sending me a read request and posting this piece of writing. i love your writing. keep at it!

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WOW! This piece is very captivating! I love your message behind it...the river of life. Great way of portraying the struggles of life. Great piece here! :)

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...i think this is quite inspiring really. Like this

[Daydreamer54]

tHIS Was beautiful and inspiring! i think it's one of your best pieces yet! great write and it's also true, life outside of him is emptiness and vanity! :)

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Lovely! Very thought provoking and filled with imagery. Losing yourself in a sain way is always a brilliant mind blowing experiance....but in the end we hope we stay sain.
Beautiful joB!

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Wow, This is so powerful and wonderful.
I found it inspirational.
Nicely done.