Lost Girl

A heavy rocker about a beautiful but troubled punk girl.

She had psychedelic hair,

It was all purples and pinks,

She'd do anything for a dare,

She was a real little minx.

She wore a real short skirt,

With stockings and heels,

She was one hell of a flirt,

With a great set of wheels.

Her glittering top,

Was cut real low,

She never knew when to stop,

She couldn't go slow.

Chorus

She was born to be wild,

She was born to be free,

She was a problem child,

She was my honey bee.

She played with fire,

But she never got burned,

Till one day she blew a tire,

And her whole world turned.

Down became up,

Up became down,

The sheriff showed up,

And ran her out of town.

Chorus

Now there's no more honey,

There's no more bee,

Ain't life funny?

Does she still miss me?

Chorus

(Fade out)

She's a lost girl...

Just a lost girl...

My lost girl....

Yeah, she's lost!

© 2018 The Iron Horseman

Author's Note

This is a heavy rocker. I can see Def Leppard performing this one. I wish!

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Overall, this is well-crafted, sounds lyrical with strong rhyme & rhythm, compelling storyline. The only thing I don't like is that you call her a honey bee. That just sounds too sweet for your poem. Similarly, blew a tire does not fit with your ongoing metaphor at all. Aside from those two details, it's great! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks, Margie. The 'honey bee' was intended to be anachronistic - just my warped sense of humor at work again! ")
As for the tire, it is meant to be literal as well as metaphorical. i.e. the sheriff picked her up after she blew a tire. But hey, it's meant to be fun, so let's not take it too seriously! :)

[barleygirl]

Yes, definitely a fun ditty with unexpected details!

[Onlyme]

This is super. catchy,cleverly done and lyrically perfect. When you recording it?

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks again, Dawn. You really don't want to hear me sing! But feel free to send me your version! :)

[Nolo Segundo]

Yes, this would make a pretty cool song-- all the best songs are really poems anyway!

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks, NS. I couldn't agree more!

[Perdition]

Loved the "Down became up..etc."..First song I think I've ever reviewed but certainly would be interested in the musical aspects Don't see this as a waltz but I am constantly surprised playing guitar myself. I like the story and now that I just saw the "heavy rocker' note I would have to agree only I'd go AudioSlave if Chris were still around or Jack White.. Thanks for sharing.

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you, Perdition. Either of those two would also be good choices. If you play around with it on your guitar, please send me an audio file so I can listen!

[Perdition]

Absolutely..though I have turned to the Taylor which is acoustic and some flamenco just to keep my insanity alive...lol. But certainly will do should I turn back to the electric, Happy Sunday!

[The Iron Horseman]

Same to you, my friend. Enjoy your weekend.

[Einstein Noodle]

would be good to hear it as you do Iron ... not much on heavy rockin' ..i will have to check out some of Def Leppard ... see what i can imagine .. nice description of the girl ... she's your honey bee eh!? ;))
E.

[The Iron Horseman]

Now come on, Noodle Soup, you know that was my twisted sense of humor at work, because you have the same sense of humor! :D
Thank you for the review, my friend. And by all means check out the Leppard. If you are not a big fan of the heavier stuff, try "Two Steps Behind.'

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahah had to give you a tiny bit of a bad time ;) i listened to Armageddon ..will check out 2 steps presently sir :)

[The Iron Horseman]

Hope you like it! Did you like Armageddon It?

[Einstein Noodle]

yesh...i did ... they aren't quite maxed out heavy in my opinion .. they do have some artistry in the mix ... the ballad is pretty mellow ..shows another side to them

[The Iron Horseman]

That's exactly right. One of the most impressive performances I have seen of them is a video of them performing an acoustic set in their local pub for friends and family!

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .................

[Declan]

Great piece. It flows well.

[The Iron Horseman]

And once more, my thanks. Do you like songs?

[Declan]

Yes I do actually, I love rock n roll and heavy metal, and some blues.

[The Iron Horseman]

Interesting! You have the same musical tastes as me. I would just add blues/rock to your list. Many of my songs and poems start off from a bass riff in my head! (Yes, I play bass).

[Declan]

Oh cool as. You must write some great stuff.
In a band now?

[The Iron Horseman]

No, just play my own stuff in the basement nowadays! Too many other things to do. I've just finished writing a Western novel that will be published either later this month or next month. That's been keeping me busy.

[Declan]

Very interesting.
I look forward to reading your stuff.

[The Iron Horseman]

Please do. The novel will not be on here though, for contractual reasons.

[Declan]

Sure, I understand.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

how about rich girl by H @ O

[The Iron Horseman]

Argh! The things I do for my friends! I usually avoid Hall and Oates like the plague. Now I remember why! Listened to 'Rich Girl' on Youtube. Wish I hadn't! Talk about twee! No, Julie, my song sounds nothing like that! Screaming twin lead guitars. bass thunder and a drummer thrashing his heart out is the way this one goes.
My apologies if you like H&O. We all have our quirks!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

lol only just read this lol true so true

[The Iron Horseman]

Nice to hear from you again, Julie. I was thinking I might have offended you! :D

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

no way not offended just time short i work full time and dont get to read all replies etc till sundays lol

[The Iron Horseman]

Good to know. Have a great week.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

love this really enjoyed it, what tune or rhythm are you going to use
give an eg of a song similar on you tube and ill humm it
no you dont want to hear my voice but i found this a great piece great for a song

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks, Jules. Glad you like it. Armageddon It by Def Leppard is about as close as i can get for you, but it is still not a good fit. Perhaps if you had the Leppard and Green Day blended you might get close. Sorry!