Yes, Strings Attached!

Wasn’t this supposed to be, a solution-

To ward off boredom?

Why then, does this seem,

Like my biggest problem?

 

I rack my brains, desperate,

For a new solution,

To solve this old solution-

Turned-problem.

 

“Just a game”, we said,

“No strings attached”, we promised.

Why then, does it tighten,

Like a noose around my heart?

 

I know you have to leave,

A thousand promises to keep,

Journeys to make,

And people to please.

 

 I know I would end up

A bump, in your road,

A sentence, in your story,

A speck, in your rear-view mirror.

 

Yet its hard to let go,

To plug another hole in my soul,

To know you’ll be happy;

With someone that won’t be me.

 

You don’t have to stay,

I will remind you time and again-

“You are not needed”,

That I am my own hero.

 

But you’d never know,

How much I want,

How much I’d miss,

How much I've loved-

 YOU....

 

 

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

The human brain is the most effed-up invention on Earth. But things come to pass... Remember what I said about time? This time was necessary too.
I don't know much to say on these issues... I'm no expert myself.

The progression is good and as usual.. you convey your emotions well.

"Why then, does it tighten,
Like a noose around my heart?"
I am partial to noose references and no, I am not suicidal either :P
Good write...

[Isabel25]

Yes...my brain has the tendency to get effed up every few months....it passes just like that. Thank you as usual. I am not questioning your partiality, just happy that you liked it . :)

[Stonz P.]

It is good and I say that not out of flattery but genuine admiration. And oops, I forgot to mention these were the favourite lines due to the noose usage.

[Aerielle Louise]

 
Yet its hard to let go,
To plug another hole in my soul,
To know you’ll be happy;
With someone that won’t be me.

The lines above really caught my attention. It conveyed a painful truth. Your poem is full of emotions. I really liked it. How I wish I could write as good as you

[Isabel25]

You are just being too sweet. And you can never compare one work with another i think. As long as you write from your heart everything would turn out to be good. Thank you for stopping by and giving me this gem of a review :)

[Aerielle Louise]

Yeah. You're right. We can never compare. It's just that, I can't help myself from admiring you. Haha. You are really great.

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Far out I have read all your work (Sorry for not reviewing every single one) and wow, you are one of the best writers I have found on this site!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Your work is amazing and that is all I can say!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Isabel25]

"Beautifully broken"? that is one interesting name. I like it.

And liar! U are yet to find more poets if that is the matter cos iam nowhere as good as many others on this sight, i mean it. But I am indeed pleased that you chose to stop by, and thank you for those really really kind words Lorna :) It is great to meet u :D

[Valkyrie Warrior]

Your poems are amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told a sad story with skill.
"But you’d never know,
How much I want,
How much I’d miss,
How much I've loved-
YOU...."
I believe love find us. When love is near. Best hold on tight to her. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michael G.]

A very good and easily read and understood poem. It has a gentle flow to it.
Your thoughts are conveyed clearly and smoothly.
In life, we may often say and do things pretending there are no strings. The problem is we forget to tell our heart what we "aren't" looking for. In this respect, you have crafted a very lovely piece of art.

[Isabel25]

Thank you for your time and words Michael :)

[Abilash Uttama]

this too is a relatable feeling, sometimes we crave for someone even though we know this will not end in desired manner but we still carry on until we are completely broken. Amazing work !

[Isabel25]

Thanx Abhi :) ya..humans are stupid that way.

[Abilash Uttama]

read 'hopeless love' it's somewhat similar and i have faith you'll like it :)

[dan]

Annie, The long goodbye to a love...it's usually heartbreaking, and not considered final by BOTH parties in the relationship. Usually one of the parties is left hurt and lonely and wishing that it hadn't happened. The protagonist in this piece spends the whole time saying, "I don't need you anymore, I'm over you," until the end of the poem it is revealed "How much I want, miss and loved you..." It sounds as if the protagonist is trying to make herself believe she's not affected, but every fiber in her is DEEPLY affected. A very nice write, filled with raw emotion and very well written. (I'm accepting your friend request...now this works both ways, you have to review some of mine too) take care...dan

[Isabel25]

Thanx a lot for reviewing my work Dan...You made me understand my protagonist a little better. At times we see ourselves better through somebody else's eye.

[dan]

That's a very wise observation. dan