Night train to rhythm 'n blues

Night train to rhythm 'n blues

A Poem by Island Hippy
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inspired....

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takin' a slow train
trippin' & rappin'
them fat scats
pickin' up boys on
the block, sayin' do
you got a ride
to the next joint?

pick me up on the
night train at the
corner of rhythm 'n blues
do you like jammin'
with them cats?

draw them crowds
in close with doo wops
grooves 'n tappin' shoes
your diabetic diamonds
& booze .... got that
boogie in your mood

while my girls play
them lovers tunes for
greasy spectators of
trains, & graffiti walls
do you got a place
I could lay at?
ridin' the night train
to rhythm 'n blues.


© 2017 Island Hippy



Author's Note

Island Hippy
Inspired by Annette Pisano Higley's 'Night Train'.

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Love your rhythmic lyrical riff here! This is a style of writing that I very much enjoy reading & writing. You've conveyed the toe-tapping nature of this by using good word rhythm & word sounds. First stanza -- "fat scats" sounds like a typo . . . ("scat" is s**t in my book!) Love your trippy trippin' trip.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Aloha barleygirl :) what a great review! Haha, the scat thing ... also a style of singing (jazz) Ell.. read more
barleygirl

5 Months Ago

I love a write that teaches me something new!
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Ty
If this isn't the smoothest piece. Love it. Tribute to the jazz era, maybe?

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Aloha Ty, I appreciate the lovely comment! Definitely a tribute to jazz... a fusing of music. the hu.. read more
Ty

5 Months Ago

My pleasure! I have a piece entitled 'Jazz' myself, take a read if you'd like!
Excellent vibe. Great R&B lyric. I'm imaging now.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Mahalo for your great comment Ken :)
I find myself tapping along and toe touching even though there is no music, bravo! Great Read.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Aloha Thomas, I appreciate your visit and the lovely comment. Mahalo. Izzy
reminded me of the sixties,great theme

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Aloha wordman, mahalo much! Definitely had that era in mind.
 wordman

5 Months Ago

my pleasure !
I need a ride on this train. Good song, drink and many friends near. I liked the poem. A hopeful and fun ride on the night train dear friend. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Aloha John, I'm sorry I missed this. Mahalo much for your great comment I really appreciate it
Coyote Poetry

5 Months Ago

I liked this one my friend and you are welcome.
Love this. It does feel like some old jazz blues.
Thoughtprovoking piece as well, relatable. I feel like sometimes we all end up on the train to rhythm 'n blues.
I do love the rhythm and and slight southern style of this, makes me wanna sing it aloud and tap my heel to the beat. XD

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Mahalo my friend, I appreciate your time and great comment. I did try and capture a very particular .. read more
Sinbulvinter

5 Months Ago

Youre very welcome!
not all spectators are greasy

Posted 5 Months Ago


"your diabetic diamonds
& booze .... got that
boogie in your mood"

I liked the rhythm in it. Needed to read something like this atm. Glad I did :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Mahalo much Yumna
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

You're welcome, Izzy. :)
It was as if i was singing a song...!! i loved the rhythm in this poem !! And the unusual language made it even more special

Posted 5 Months Ago


Island Hippy

5 Months Ago

Mahalo Pia, I appreciate your visit an comment. I tried to capture a very specific vibe with this po.. read more

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