The scene

his stare is crisp. 

it’s hard to explain

like his eyes are always re-freshing 

the scene; 

you know like when you swipe down 

on your overpriced iphone 

& the page refreshes 

code transmitting or is it translating? 

 ...new information (who the hell cares) 

y’all know what I’m sayin. 

-

an entire generation of social decline 

like the art of conversation, 

an awareness that requires presence. . . 

and still his stare is crisp 

if you bothered to look up from your device 

you might have seen his magnificent smile.

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

You nailed it my ohana! Your clever, rhythmic and allegorical poem is so true. Your lines rap out and summon the “scene” so musically and authentically. Your eloquent words convey a real-time honest, cutting warning and lesson. Unplug!!- yes. Play it in the key of....?? Brava! Xo

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo for dropping by and your generous review ohana x

[Einstein Noodle]

Bravo Ms. Hippie! could not agree more ... our kids come to visit and are all sitting around the living room ...each engrossed with the ever present iphone ... and the really crazy thing was....they were texting each other ..i am not lying ... it was after that that i confiscating all devices as a price for admittance ... a few resisted but the aroma of our barbecue over-ruled and ohh what lovely faces i saw ;)))) love this one my friend
E.
ps. must agree with Annette about the rhythm and rap/eloquence ... she said it so well!

[Island Hippy]

Oh dear, that is funny though E. In a rather ridiculous way. I find it odd that we can’t put our devices away and be with one another - even for the shortest period.

Many mahalo for your visit and for sharing, much appreciated x

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you and back at ya! i don't have any "devices" ...only a trac phone which i only use on trips, a land line and my computer....i relish and try to protect the peace unconnected brings me ;)))) love and joy .. and again you are very welcome ... i appreciate your sharing here at the Cafe!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Wow okay, let me say, I wish I could write like you! I admire the thoughtful yet calm aura in your pieces, really. And the touch of romance you add to them (flattering aside;))
This speaks for the young generation like me lol and reading this reminded me that I need to put down my phone more especially when my little brother is talking to me...! lol
Excellent write, Izzy. x

[Island Hippy]

Haha, Yumna I’m sure your brother doesn’t mind (too much) but I bet he would love your undivided attention every now and then. We all do it though eh? Even we who are slightly older ...lol. Many mahalo for visiting x

[Paul Bell]

I suppose the telly has been replaced with every other device known to man.
Probably why phone users walk straight onto the road without thinking.
Kids go crazy when you take the computer away.
Maybe human contact is becoming a distant relation.

[Island Hippy]

Sometimes we just need to unplug and be present, mahalo.

[Crowley]

Great social comment and very genuine writing. A realistic quality tha is very refreshing to me. And a stare being crisp....oh how I love that line. Wonderful stuff.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Crowley, what a great comment, I’m thrilled. Much mahalo. Izzy

[emmajoy]

It's magic to my eyes, seeing you and your poetry here again! Seems like a chair drawn up and the kettle hot or the wine ready for a gentle sip - at first!

Your finely laid words here are intriguing - as if that smile could be a white flaG, a sense of final surrender.. a sweetmeat in anyone's language. However, falling into your words at start.. I wonder if you're just seeing the world at large, unaware of human contact, waiting... waiting... waiting to be touched. As always you beckon me into a muddle of possibilities which i love. Welcome back.. x

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Em, it was a tad rough out of the blocks but it was a nice feeling to pen something. Inspired by my beautiful husband, who wore a crisp stare and magnificent smile... haha, and love hearing your thoughts on this.
Thank you for your warmth and generosity. x

[emmajoy]

Even morning's open the mind to possibilities, dark and drear can invite one end of the scale or the other. Maybe it depends on whether or not we're positioned head to North, feet to South overnight.. tis said. So, so, your words must have stemmed from the right point because your sabbatical doesn't show any stress.. you still write with your heart and mind intact... the wildness good and proper will come later. :) x

[Coyote Poetry]

Perfect ending to the poetry. New world. What you need, could be in front of you and new generation stuck on the phones and the laptops. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I enjoyed this one
Coyote

[Island Hippy]

Absolutely sometimes what we need is staring you in the face (and smiling) Much mahalo John.

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome my friend.