Naked

Not sexual in nature, don't be put off by the title. Just a confession of sorts...

 

In my life, I have loved many.

And yet, I've been loved by so few.

Each lover blowing in, and out again

From my life.  Some, like the storms

That mark the end of summer,

Barely wilting my outer skin.

Others, like gale force winds,

Ripping and tearing at the surface,

Taking with them, a part of me

A layer, maybe two;

Gone, or perhaps just redistributed,

Like the sands of white beaches

In the wake of a cyclonic force

What’s left now, as I sit and ponder?

My life and the meaning, or lack thereof?

Are the secrets of my ‘Self’

Exposed, raw; Naked.

My protective covering; Stripped,

Peeled away, layer by layer,

Until all that you see before you

Is the stuff that is me?

Pure, yet not.

Beautiful?  Perhaps.

Flawed?  Indeed.

Author's Note

comments, criticism? photo credit: Sean Nel

Reviews

[John McGrael]

i like the theme of this poem, its cool
something i truly have no experience with, as i have yet to fall in love
so i really cannot relate to this poem :P

but i really did enjoy reading it!

my favorite lines were:
"From my life. Some, like the storms
That mark the end of summer,
Barely wilting my outer skin."

the storms that mark the end of summer imagery, i could really picture it in my mind

i have no ideas on what i would do with this poem though!!
sorry!

[Lorraine]

Deeply meaningful in its sentiments and simply so pure. The fragility of one's heart was clearly conveyed in a poem so heartwarming and honest. Your message cuts across and your words sound musical to the ear. I like the gentle flow of words as if every line drifts off along a sad tune.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[The Flawed]

Hay I thought I was The Flawed? LOL
This is so deep, and so brave to bare your thoughts so honestly on the page for all to see, my kind of writing.
I think its great writing.
But what do I know?
Well done

[Anthony Beal]

An introspective piece; I liked your usage of forces of nature (storms, cyclones, gale force winds, etc.) as metaphors for the power of love and what havoc it can wreak upon the life of one who falls to easily.

[Trikius]

Nice work...(Are the secrets of my 'Self'Exposed, raw; Naked) my favorite part I think.

[Q'ANIL]

wow...this is truly a beautiful and powerful write...

"In the wake of a cyclonic force" this line gave me the chills...and in a good way too...i love the use of powerful words and statements...amazing...

this is a piece written by someone with a rare talent...

~CJM