Ending It

Ending It

A Poem by J'Eliot

Ending It


Standing against the window pane,

Thinking of the suffering pain,

Tears seem to never stop,

Life is filled with darkness over the top.

 

Holding onto a silver blade,

Thinking of slitting my slithering bait,

Oh no, wait;

I am the bait!

 

Slitting my wrist,

The eyes see mist,

Destroying every dream I had,

Ending all the pain I ever had.

 


© 2013 J'Eliot



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I liked this piece. It's short, but it tells a tale in a way of its own. You might want to see the last line of the first stanza again. I don't know, you may want to shorten it to enhance the flow. Otherwise, well done :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


hmmmmmmmm suicide is never an option we fight until our last breath my young friend but okay write and good rhyme scheme i never do well with rhyme scheme so i always congratulate it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


That's a good though sad poem, I'm sorry you felt all this pain...
Well written :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J'Eliot

4 Years Ago

Thanks! :D
annabellee

4 Years Ago

you're welcome :)
I really love this one. Very deep and awesome poem!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J'Eliot

4 Years Ago

Aww, thank you!
Another Poet

4 Years Ago

your welcome!
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Very powerful. I have thought about that before. I know how it feels to be that close to the pain. Very well written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J'Eliot

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)

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