Butterfly Wings

 

 

a life within me

but never born

she is golden sunlight

dancing on a daisy

she is butterfly wings

gracing her mother's garden

I never saw her face

nor held her in my arms

but I dream her smiles

and hear her laughter

between wakeful moments

on moonlit nights

when a part of me

still feels her deep within

and forgets the emptiness

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Graphic credit: Google Images

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Please don't think that I say this lightly or in jest; but this is, hands down, the absolute best poem that I have EVER read regarding a mother's feelings toward her miscarried child. Each word, each line glimmered like the sun bursting forth on a rainy day. You captured the sadness; but overwhelmingly, you captured the love that, captured for a moment, can outshine a thousand lifetimes of sadness.

I don't doubt for a moment that this really happened to you, as the words are from your heart. I can feel the heartbeat and the pulse of life within.

A dear friend of mine just suffered the same loss. I am so sorry for yours, but I have so say that she left such a memorable touch on your heart that it gave life to a beautiful, beautiful poem.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your very gracious review, Linda. I appreciate your words more than I can say.

[Pete A...]

Yes I agree Linda ,quite the Write ...thinking it one o the nicest reads ive had ever had the pleasure of readin ...

[Praveeta]

Well written poem describing the loss of unborn child. A truly heartfelt piece.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Praveeta. Your words are a beautiful Christmas gift to me. Merry Christmas!

[Praveeta]

You are most welcome Joyce. Merry Christmas!

[NeiL ArandA]

Almost a thousand views. This is really incredible. Short and in free verse style. Melancholic and sort of reflective in nature. I knew someone dear to us who wanted to have a child of their own and ended up in miscarriage. Its devastatingly painful. I thought they could never recover from their devastating setback. Yet God proved them otherwise that HE is always able.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Neil. I appreciate your leaving behind such a thoughtful review. Merry Christmas!

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and emotional poem. I believe woman feel and know more. Life come from their body. I like the description. Allowed the reader to feel and understand the thoughts in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Coyote for your very warm review. I do feel women enjoy a close relationship with their bodies, maybe because we are the ones who actually foster a new life within ourselves. I really appreciate your taking the time to read my poem and leave your thoughts behind.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

This was so very touching and beautiful. Such sincere expression of an artist... thank you for displaying such strength.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, PH. Your review makes me smile, and I feel ten feet tall. I really appreciate your very nice words.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

They were very much deserved.

[PANTHER]

You so did bring tears to eyes. Only soulful sorry can pen such beauty in sadness. You are bared to the reader Joyce and their hearts go out to you. Tom

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Tom. Your thoughts are always gracious, and I really appreciate hearing them.

[Leslie Philibert]

I looked at this because ( this sounds silly I know ) Graham Greene is my favourite novelist, and found here a well written poem, good job !

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Leslie. The important thing to me is that you did find my work and that you made the effort to let me know what you thought of it. I appreciate your reading and reviewing my work so favorably. It means a lot to me.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This is an eloquent, graceful poem with such sad feelings at the same time as being bright and hopeful. Can't determine the true meaning as it is not childbirth or even the loss of a child. Perhaps a metaphor of love itself?

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much for your very kind review. I wrote this poem about the loss of my unborn child, John, but once the poem is published it becomes the province of its readers to determine its meaning, so while I might have had the intention of conveying one thing, the readers' ideas are equally valid. Thanks once again for reading and reviewing my poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I did wonder as my ex-wife and I lost a child an I know what it is like. Unfortunately she did not reflect on it as creatively. Many women see it as a failure of their womanhood. I am sorry for your loss though.

[Joyce S. Greene]

I am very sorry for your loss, too, John. I hope your wife is feeling much stronger and happier now.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

She is a wife thrice removed lol!

[Joyce S. Greene]

I'm sorry about that, too, John. But perhaps the current one will be the right one for you. I wish you the best of luck.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Joyce. I am in between lol and my Life at least has been far from dull. It has also given me a great deal of experience to put. Into words.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is splendid. Concise but so beautiful and there's a deep emotion concealed in each line. A love forever which will live forever in one's heart...especially in a mother's heart.
Great!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much for leaving such lovely thoughts behind, Dhaye. They mean a lot to me.

[Nebunova]

The flow and delicacy of this piece is quite magical. you comparing her to all things nature gives me the feeling that although she is not physically here, her spirit will live on for an eternity coinciding with the mother earth, as well as mother you. beautiful.

[Joyce S. Greene]

What a lovely review, Nebunova. Thank you very much for leaving your thoughts behind. They mean a lot to me.