Drifter

Drifter

A symphony of images play

Echoing my life gone by,

Standing by the roadside,

Backpack breaking my shoulder,

Holding my loved photo,

A family lost to time.

 

A violent shock clears my mind,

I drift ashore, my flotsam scattered by,

The beach shone with silver sand,

My mind tricks my head again,

I grasped myself, bowing in pain,

A broken bone found inside my hull.

 

Cars pass by my shaking image,

Ignoring this lost soul, adrift from all,

Night came; the cold touched me again,

Alone except my twisted voices,

My boat capsized, my home deserted,

My mind has lost its bearings.

 

 

Reviews

[Jwana Creer Yeshua]

This is a very, very strong poem. My review of this poem is written about someone who is lost. Lost in the world. They walking in the Land of Nod. The Land of Nod is not a place where anyone should it is the wrost place on Earth. When in this place you feel like thw world is ending. But in reality it's just beggining. One way, only one way we can get out of this place. This was is God. God is our stronghold and will help us thruogh anything. So when you feel like the world has stopped take a look around because it is just the beggining. Great Write! I will be looking for more in the near future.

Humbly,
Jwana Creer Yeshua

[Emily B]

a tremendous write, welcome to the cafe if you are new. pleased to meet you if you've been around longer.

[RougeAngel]

this poem created a great mental image for me. it was easy to put myself into this piece and really be standing by the roadside or being tossed ashore. great write!

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Amazing. You tell a story that's quite touching, without being straight-up with it. Ya know what I'm saying? You don't tell exactly what's going on at first, piquing the reader's interest, only to explain later and give the illusion of a mystery solved. Very nice technique.
KH

[danni.]

I thought it was great :]

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Good work!

[Ameerah]

all i can say is WOW! this was really great and it got to me..i got emotional..it's great!

[deeps]

I like this write
I found emotion that flows out in the end.
The heart can capsize at times.
wonderful expressions here.

[Jason]

This is a great body of work right here. I love the picture it paints, as the drifter walks along with only his picture, and he slowly breaks down to time....This is a wonderful write!