Don't Tell Me, Show Me

Don't Tell Me, Show Me

A Poem by Jadon96
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I really don't know how to describe this poem. Honestly, I don't even know where the idea came from or what it exactly represents.

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Show me a sign, 
tell me everything will be fine.
I'll look up and wonder why, 
holding back every tear and every cry.

 
Show me you're here to stay, 
tell me you'll guide me along the way. 
There's a path I cannot find, 
it's invisible even if there's an outline. 


Show me there is hope, 
tell me how to get up this heavy slope. 
Here I go, I start to climb, 

but I end up mixed in the intertwine. 


Show me there's nothing to fear, 

tell me where to go from here. 

I'm blind, not able to see. 
I need you here, here with me.

 
Show me everyone has a heart, 
tell me the true meaning of having a heart. 
I need you more than anything, 
I need your love-ever so caring. 


Show me everything I need to know, 
tell me to take things ever so slow. 

I don't know where to go or what to do,

I'm running away, vanishing in the thick bamboo.


I need your mind, your wisdom, 
and your strength to lift me high,

and carry me along this time to come,

ever so swift, into the breeze, there I fly.


When you tell me these things, 

maybe I can be just like you. 
When you show me these things, 
maybe you can be too.


© 2014 Jadon96



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Jadon96
What do you think the poem represents? Please share and feel free to comment your suggestions!

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To me, this is the cry of lonely heart on the cusp of a new love, hoping it's true and lasting.

Your meter and rhyme is pretty good. It falls apart a bit with the lines that end "wisdom" and "up" and "length." But the ideas in those three lines are tremendously expressive.

I would recommend you break the poem into stanzas or double-space between couplets. It will make it easier to follow for the reader. I find that many poems are more meaningful when the visual layout is part of the driving force for the reader.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Jadon96

3 Years Ago

See, that is exactly what I mean. You should like take that previous comment and post it into every .. read more
MomzillaNC

3 Years Ago

Well, thank you. But, it really comes of just reading great authors. Great literature illuminates an.. read more
Jadon96

3 Years Ago

That is true.

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Jadon96
Jadon96

West Frankfort, IL



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