What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[Frieda P]

This is so sweet, you forget the pain so quickly....nice write.

[Siren]

wonderful. I love it. painful, yes, but joyous as well. strong. you've done great!

[LittleLover]

This is very unique and interesting, i like the flow and your choice of words

[CandyFirex3]

Oh its so beautiful, the ending almost made me cry. Its so lovely and I just love how you created this new perception on a child being brought into the world. Definetly one of you greatest pieces in my opinion.

[Rhea]

this poem is about child birth... challenge solved! Its one of the most unique pieces I have read... a wonderful read

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh a very nice way to describe pregnancy and giving birth. I like this a lot, you left a challenge in this poem for readers to think of what is about by putting just enough meaning of the beauty of it inside the poem. Enjoyed this.

[Donald Cole]

i figured it out, at the end anyway. Such a lovely deception into a most beautiful joy, ya.
I like the way this transitions, the entire process through the ending....
goood job
Don

[Joshua Randall]

This was very beautiful. Thanks for the write. Cheers :)

[AK]

Wow! Brilliant write! It is most certainly a poem about childbirth, I figured in the second stanza:)
It is so well written, I must say kudos!

[Rasputin]

This wasn't exactly hard to figure out. Well-written, though, and clearly heart-felt.
I imagine you're a pro-lifer..?