S.L.U.T

a poem about a girl who used to be my best friend, but she decided she'd rather sleep around, then have any real friends, and just left me.

Does it feel good?

knowing nobody loves you,

knowing you left us all behind,

Knowing that your being used.

 

Do you realise?

That your privacy is online,

That you're labelled 'A good time'

You lost all our respect.

 

Do you notice?

your just an object,

some one to f**k with,

with no added drama,

 

Does your daddy know?

You slept with every boy in town,

Bet your mummy doesn't realise,

that your sleeping around.

 

Do you feel good?

when you look at yourself in the mirror,

you're all alone now.

Is it all becoming clearer?

 

Are you surprised?

That you don't have a disease,

That they aren't coming back for more?

That you turned out to be a f*****g w***e.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

This is just beautiful. The raw emotions that are left here are quite powerful, and you've been able to harness them just enough to create something with them. It is a powerful work that is easily relatable. I feel that too many times we don't give anger enough credit for it's power to be creative, but this proves that wrong. The structure is nice, repeating a question is brilliant. I'd love to know what sparked this gem to be written. Thank you.

[DarkDaughter]

I like your powerfull emotions, very good job. (:

[Siren]

You've done great, dear friend. It's hard to watch a friend just go down the wrong path with no regard for anyone else. Sometimes, the stronger words are the only things that expel the emotions. I hope you find a friend who values your relationship--and themselves--more than cheap pleasure. Stay strong!

[Sourodip]

It didn't hurt...Rather it speaked to me in a very strong way.Although it might be a little too personal but i guess we all can relate to it...Privacy online(social media), just an object and last but not the least....reflection on mirror.
I enjoyed reading it. Hope you have or will get over this friends of yours someday...:)

[under-the-water]

im gunna b completely truthful - this is the most honest poem I've ever read.
i thought the best put together lines were
Do you notice?
your just an object,
some one to f**k with,
with no added drama,

Does your daddy know?
You slept with every boy in town,
Bet your mummy doesn't realise,
that your sleeping around.

nice job - just don't show your friend this poem
the results might not end up positively
hahha

[SuicidePact.]

HAHA no I won't show her! She'd probably embrace it and be flattered -.-

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

this write may speak to many im sure your heart is shown through this and great writting may offend some but anyone who reads this will see far beyind the word great depth in this my friend.

Keep posting and honestly perfect job on this.
Sorry I havent read your work sooner.

[SuicidePact.]

Thankyou, and that's okay! :)

[Xx_Mizfit_xX]

Raw emotion! Love it! Not offended in the least and I can completely relate to how you're feeling in this piece.

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This is very well written. Emotion is raw and straight to the point. I like this. Keep up the good work :)

[LittleLover]

This is a really good poem, and im sorry someone left you for that. I hate people like that. I like the questions you asked, this is very powerful and deep. You showed your anger well. Great job

[Renae DiSilva]

Very powerful use of the loaded words. I could understand your anger and emotion perfectly from the first stanza.