Rain, fall down and wash me away

Standing in a shower of rain,

I've dropped my life into a puddle,

Let the heavens wash away my pain,

Hold my hand to prevent my stumble.

 

If I fall will you pick me up?

If you slip what would we do?

Standing in the ran, Wash me away.

Wash me away,

Reviews

[Siren]

Good, good write. I love this. It's dark but hopeful, and shows the beauty of death. Amazing job. You did a great job here.

[Sam Severn]

Like a child's nursery rhyme gone to hell.....Powerful n' potent stuff! My favorite poem of yours, so far.... ㋡

[♋ Iris ♋]

Good write! keep it up~!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

short, but you sure picked the right words!

[AK]

Very nice again!

[Tamia123]

Another good piece that has a good meaning :) Great Job!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Direct and without mercy, a great piece.

[Dayran]

Its difficult facing up to choices sometimes. It may appear that its easier to have someone 'wash me away' and make the decisions for us. Where you are in a puddle, this can lead you to an ocean. Then perhaps we are forced to make some choices. Nice write!

[Mellie]

I really like this poem sounds like you could maybe sing it as a song? Nice job.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like this. Sounds like it would be a good song too. This is sweet.