another love story...

another love story...

A Poem by SuicidePact.

Why can’t you see?

What you truly mean to me?

You helped me become who I wanna be.

We began to love, passionately.

That one special day, you on the ground, on one knee

Years past, now I’m expecting your baby...

I just want to thank you for everything you gave me.


© 2012 SuicidePact.



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What a sweet poem.... ;)

Posted 1 Year Ago


nice

Posted 1 Year Ago


A lovely poem about how love can grow.

Blessings, Tammy

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sweet and touching

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Rae
I like the way everything is a different color. It sort of strengthens emotion for me. Very nice write. I think my favorite parts are the ones in blue.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Very colourful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


i think that the meaning behind this is very easy to find and it is a very good progression from pondering and understanding:
"We began to love, passionately.
That one special day, you on the ground, on one knee"
those are my fave two lines

Posted 1 Year Ago


Captivating, and meaningful.

A nice progression from questioning to thanking. Very well done here!

I do wonder what would happen if you could add a transition between the last two lines. Just try to see what effect that produces. (something like, "I'm expecting you baby, just to thank you .... ")

Great piece of art!


Posted 1 Year Ago


I love this, from the passionate words, to the colors to the real true emotions.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Awwww........ Such a good one. :D

Posted 1 Year Ago



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