- 3 --

We are still driving 25 minutes later, Louis has the music up so loud, he’s singing along equally as loud. I can’t help but admire him with his messy brown hair, his perfect white teeth and his playful blue eyes. I can’t help but smile whenever he turns to face me, checking to see if I’m watching him.

Turning down the music, to start a conversation I look at him, waiting for him to say something, and he does.

“I like your name, it’s pretty mad actually, wish I had a cool name like that Jaedy” he says to me.

“It’s a boy’s name really” I complain, but he just laughs and messes up my hair with his one free hand.

He screams suddenly, making me jump, my heart is uncontrollable, racing, beating out of my chest, I was absolutely not expecting that.

“What!”

“We’re almost there silly.” He laughs at me, with that cheeky laugh of his.

We pull into a bowling alley; I’ve only been here once before, on my 8^th birthday, bowling isn’t really my thing. But I guess it really depends on whose keeping you company.

“Here we are, I know bowling is lame, you know bowling is lame, but bowling with Louis is never lame Jaedy”

“You are probably right there” I agree nodding my head.

We individually get out of the car and Louis locks it with a push of a button, leading the way toward the entrance.

The cool air hits me as we enter the air conditioned room, the bright fluorescent lights enter my vision, and Louis takes me over toward the dining area. I remember being here 9 years ago, although they’ve re decorated a little bit. It’s still the same as it was in my memory.

Reviews

[luv2dream]

The last you wrote this is april? Dude you better continue!

[MOON]

Good dialogue and description.

[Donald Cole]

i liked the other two better, i know. although it is hard for me to remember the storyline, i remember a little. anyway, this one needs a little more.......
little by little, it does, come together....
Don

[Zion]

Still very good, I love your writing.

[zero binty]

Character build and personality traits shown wonderfully here. Love the story so far.

[Barbara Walker]

This is good but i agree with Tabitha about the scream. Just doesn't fit. Keep on writing!

[Tabitha t]

very descriptive and detailed. The dialogue runs smoothly the only thing that seems out of place to me is why he screamed. seems to random and not enoguh of an explanation to make much sense or add anything to the plot besides this great job. I would like it a bit longer. maybe a whole chapter length. 250 words per page at least six pages. :)

[Secret Lullaby]

lol i wonder what will happen next :)

[Deandra Dawn]

You are very descriptive, I love it. Good job.

[Laura Storm]

Lovin this. Hope theres more to come.