Perfect Date

I only share grits with very special people.

They sat together 
at a table for two.
Their first time alone 
no need for a menu.  
He stared into her eyes
a deep hazel-brown
until her face began to blush
and her eyes moved down.
Then she looked up
for the first time she knew
as she stared into his eyes
of deep ocean blue,
That this was the man, 
she was meant to spend
this night in his arms
and her soul would mend.
They held an embrace
and in his arms, she fit
then they sat side-by-side 
sharing a bowl of grits.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is fun & flirty & I like the way it seems to build up to an anti-climax crescendo. As we read along, we're waiting for this amazing revelation as to why this shared meal has captured this narrator's heart with such a swoop of intensity . . . and then we find out it's grits. Whatever floats your boat, my friend! *tee! hee!* I'm in the mood for something playful & silly like this, after all the intensity we're going thru on the political front (((HUGS)))

[James]

You never thought of grits as romantic? What? I was just goofing off and thought that I was getting a bit too serious with the love poems. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'perfect Date'
James,
Well, I was wondering how this one would end.....hmmm. I guess with the detail that was provided we readers will imagine out own outcomes and scenarios. I enjoyed the descriptions given and the cute and fun too.
Kathy

[Jacob Clifford]

Great ending. It was mushy and sweet, and then there's the surprise ending of grits. If I keep reading your poems, I'm eventually going to have to try those darn things just so I know what you're talking about.

[James]

Give them a shot Clifford, you can't lose.

[WithinTheHeart]

Very sweet.
Mushy, and gets all the feels going for certain.

[Lydia Shutter]

What a sweet romantic write this is....young love. I could see his blue eyes and the blush on her cheeks. Lovely. Lydi**

[James]

Thanks, Lydia, Glad you liked my five-minute write

[Ana Papaya]

awww, sweet and romantic.
this pleases my mushy female heart.
remember first dates is fun

[Ana Papaya]

that should say remembering :)

[James]

I don't know where all this mushy stuff is coming from.

Alwasy fun seeing you here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, great first dates...Grits!

ha ha...love it.

[James]

Five-minute write and I'm finding grammatical errors every time I read it.

Glad you got a kick out of it. I tried not to go to mushy-mushy.

[KT-B]

flows so nicely, I loved this paints a lovely picture of first date, well done

[James]

thanks so much.