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A Poem by James McFadyen

To think of you is to die,
And die, and die again
In everlasting ecstasy
Only to be wrenched back 
By the cold unrest of emptiness 
That fills my heart
When I am not with you. 

As sobering as the ocean air
revitalising, replenishing, dousing
This burning desire.
I dare not breathe too suddenly
As to snuff out this inflamed
and infernal love.

I dare not become the extinguisher 
Though I daren't stoke 
Such consuming flames that
If left unmaintained threaten
To devour us all.

For I know what will come
After the purge in fire
And that is my world reduced
To a hollow, voiceless, languishing
Shell of entropy.       


© 2014 James McFadyen



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I was breathless while reading this poem, and once I could breath again, I read it again :)
I don't know if there is a compliment grand enough to express how such deep truth could be expressed so beautifully.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Hi James, although a layperson to the penning of poetry, I am so I'm impressed with your ability to convey, images, feelings and the voice in your work that resonates in my own experiences!

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Maureen, I am happy that my poetry could evoke such emotions that you can relate to.
WOW, this is beautiful, elegant. Juts amazing. I love your choice of words. Great imagery...Just amazing

I am speechless,

Thank you for sharing, you are very talented!

~Suk

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing your benevolent words Suk, you are too kind
The Black Warrior

3 Years Ago

You're very welcome!
This is impressive, love the repeats in L1 and L2, almost Donne like, and the use of entropy, this has the feeling of the metaphysical poets, well written !

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Leslie, I'm flattered that you use John Donne to compare my writing style to. It is a priv.. read more
So sad when love brings us to this, yet we are unable to stop the feelings, despite our best efforts.

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

And that is why I try and stem the flow with poetry. Thank you
hauntingly brilliant in oh so many ways

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

such a powerful impression! Thank you so much for your feedback
Quite empathetic in the delivery and soothing to the reader well done

Posted 3 Years Ago


James McFadyen

3 Years Ago

Thank you Thomas, always a pleasure to have you review my writing
James as always sublime intellegent and enjoyable poetry.
'Since entropy is a state function, the change in the entropy of a system is the same for any process going from a given initial state to a given final state, whether the process is reversible or irreversible. However irreversible processes increase the combined entropy of the system and its environment. A state function, function of state, state quantity, or state variable is a property of a system that depends only on the current state of the system, not on the way in which the system acquired that state. A state function describes the equilibrium state of a system. For example, internal energy, enthalpy, and entropy are state quantities because they describe quantitatively an equilibrium state of a thermodynamic system, irrespective of how the system arrived in that state.' This is a paraphrasing of the conversation we had.

Posted 3 Years Ago



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James McFadyen

London, Richmond upon Thames, United Kingdom



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