Tanka Poem 1

Composed in the style of Japanese Tanka. it takes the form of five lines and a syllabic pattern of 5-7-5-7-7.

Your name, it sings like,

Raindrops on a serene lake.

Dulcimers in spring.

Now someone else sings your name,

Calling silence unto me. 

Author's Note

My work takes inspiration from the poetess Ono no Komachi, whose writings tend to flirt with themes concerning sorrow, loss, and unrequited love.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another very well versed piece. Does it require the comma at the end of the opening line?