Haiku 4

When such hearts are-

broken by love’s malice

they bruise, autumn brown.

Reviews

[Kay]

This is simple and profound in its imagery. The last line of a haiku really allows you to choose which emotional flavor to leave in the reader's mouth. I imagined that 'love's malice' was a knife-like wind splitting the leaf, unforgiving and forbidding of life to flow through the few long veins that it had. Now disconnected and chopped up, nothing fills or fuels the leaf and it suddenly bruises out of its natural color into decay.

[Willard Wells]

Numbers and form are fine, but the message in the end is what matters and you have achieved that. well Done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A poignant and sad piece with heaps of emotion packed in three lines. Is line one short of a syllable?