Beginnings

Beginnings

A Poem by Firemay
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Beginnings and endings are everything we have in life

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Every thing we have in life 

Starts with beginnings

Our love, our life, our freedom

To our losses and winnings

This is because 

Everything has ends

Our love, our life, our freedom

And our friends

After the end 

There is always a start

And with it comes the beginning

That's the way of our world's art.

At every end, we have a beginning

To everything there is a start

Our life's beginning is as a baby 

And it's end is at the stop of our heart

What we have in the middle

The story itself, is ours to fill in 

With moments and memories

And treasures times within

Every door that closes 

Another will open 

No matter how much

The other door was broken

Everything we have in life

Starts with beginnings

Our love, our life, our freedom

To our losses and winnings




© 2015 Firemay



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I agree with your logic.
"Starts with beginnings
Our love, our life, our freedom
To our losses and winnings"
First step is to be active and willing to accomplish any action. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Thank you!
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome.
A great poem. :)
Beginnings are definitely an art in themselves. A blank canvas for us to paint whatever we see fit, whether it be ourselves or our situations. Keep up the good work!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Thank you and i totally agree!
I loved this poem.
Thank You for sharing :)!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

haha, thank you for the kind words!
zaisham9393

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome :D
Your message of the poem reminded me of Thomas Edison's amazing faith in life....You are a very inspiring writer my dear poetess, i always find some amazing message in your works.....God bless you....Another amazing work....Full ratings.....

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Firemay

1 Year Ago

thank you so much!!!!!!! i'm happy you enjoy it
You are mature , your words are so beautiful
I am happy for our new beginning

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Thank you! Yeah, people often say i'm mature for my age.
I'm happy for it too :)
Good poem! Enjoyed reading. Keep it up :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much
I enjoyed the message... sometime in life everything has to come to an end. The only thing we can hope for is to leave a good enough impression to be remembered by :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Yeah, that's true. There's also a quote that says " everything will be okay at the end, if it's not .. read more
Wow, that was a pretty deep poem. I love the message, that when something ends there always is a new beginning. That's a comforting thought. I also like how the line "Our love, our life, our freedom" returns multiple times.

I have some small suggestions:

"To our loses and winnings"
Maybe change "loses" to "losses", as that seems to fit better.

"The story itself
Is ours to fill in"
As this poem has a pretty consistent rhyming scheme, you might want to consider joining these two lines together. The way it is now, this disrupts the rhyming you had going on.

"Every door that closes
Is another opened
No matter how much
The other door was broken"

This is the only section that does not follow the rhyming schedule. As you've been using on throughout the rest of the poem, it does feel kinda weird to not use it here. Maybe try rephrasing "Is another opened" so that it ends on "open" instead? That way it would rhyme with "broken".

Posted 1 Year Ago


Firemay

1 Year Ago

Thank you so muck for the feed back. I appreciate it so much!
Another set of eyes is always .. read more

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Added on December 16, 2015
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Tags: life, begin, start, end, death, love, friendship, hope, future, moments

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