- - Boundless love - -

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A Poem by Anindita Janhabee
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Cause love has no bounds...

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I too love you…


I just don’t know how to begin

Also have no idea how did it happen,

Just three days of our meeting

And those three magical words have wrapped in…


Oh what a pleasure I get talking to you

And your cute smile that glows,

Has taken away my hunger and sleep

Just the perfect love it shows…


Isn’t it strange about the co-incidence?

That we both conveyed the same thing,

To each other overnight; I was awestruck

At your charming, loving and emotional being…


The only thing I desire for

Is your promise to be together forever,

Whatever may come along the way

I promise to care and endeavour…


Just can’t thank you enough

For binding this broken heart of mine,

I hope through this poetry

My love for you does shine…


When I say that I do admire you

Please feel it’s true and honest,

You are the one so sweet and kind

I always want to call the closest…


Whenever I say you goodbye

Please accept it without any sort of cry,

Because that will be the day

When I will die…

 


 

 

 

 


© 2016 Anindita Janhabee



Author's Note

Anindita Janhabee
I hope the message gets into the heart...
Thank you for your warm reads...

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So beautifully composed . . . its no surprize dt ur lover will again fall in love after reading this . . . i wil not cll it a masterpiece . . but yess highly impressive . . a lot of positivity spreads out while reading ds . .

Posted 10 Months Ago


Anindita Janhabee

10 Months Ago

Haha...
thank you lotssssss... for your honest words....
It sounds exactly like a teen poem, its the heart of the teen that is depicting here........i liked it.....keep up your work......well done!!!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Anindita Janhabee

11 Months Ago

highly appreciated your review but one thing, teen poem.....yet I think this teen poem has many aspe.. read more
I will start by saying I meant no disrespect to your poem or undermining your efforts when it comes to the poem. However I shall state my views as and how I felt.
To begin with this poem is structurally sound, grammatically fine as well, but I am sorry to say there is nothing fresh in your poetry that I haven't heard or seen before. Your rhyme scheme is unusual but not unheard of. But they sound forced. The colour is unnecessary it's distracting and doesn't serve a purpose unless there are two people reciting this poem and the colour is used to differentiate between the two. Problem with your poem is you are telling me. Not showing me things. You talk about conversations. I want to know what those conversations were. Don't say you admire him. Show me how you admire him, why you admire him. How he saved your broken heart. Are you getting my point? This feels to me devoid of emotion, I understand that you want to convey deep emotions, but you aren't, you are telling things. Plus your use of cliched paragraphs in between is also a downer. Borrowed words, if I had to put it.

Now what you did do good is have a good balance in vocabulary there are some complex words but most are simple. You have a certain sense of flow in your poem. But it reads more prose than poem. Arrange them and you will see it will read as prose.
I understand English isn't your first language. But I am sure it will improve with time. Might I suggest you would want to read song lyrics?

Notice how most lyrics have a certain flow? That's poetry in the rhythm and flow sense. So try getting that same sort of flow and rhythm in your poetry.

It's a great attempt this piece of writing but room for improvement is present.

Posted 11 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Érenn

11 Months Ago

Umm I never said one cannot go back and refine what one wrote after writing from.their heart is it? .. read more
Anindita Janhabee

11 Months Ago

oh... okay... that's absolutely fine.. yeah you are right... i can definitely refine and expand.. c.. read more
Érenn

11 Months Ago

Sure thing don't mention it.
Awesome one never saw such love and so much heart touching lines uff..

Posted 11 Months Ago


Anindita Janhabee

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your visit. I appreciate your review .... thanks a lot!!!😊
I very rarely say this! As poetry really isn't my thing. But this one touched me emotionally. That's hard to do for me with poetry.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Anindita Janhabee

11 Months Ago

Am really very glad...
Chris A Jones

11 Months Ago

Thank you!
Anindita Janhabee

11 Months Ago

my pleasure...
It is magical and soulful poem..
Nicely written
And those last lines were emotional

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

Last four lines are my favourite ones...
Thank you so much for reading...
Ashish

1 Year Ago

Pleasure to read this.. :)
I really enjoyed this poem a lot. This was a poem that I really needed to read as I am going through a tough time and I haven't really been writing any poetry as of late because I just haven't had the inspiration. This poem definetly brought it back. Thank you for your wonderful work and I can't wait to read your next piece of work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

So very thanks sir...
I wish your time passes with care and speed... Writing overcomes depres.. read more
Jordan Smith

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome
Whenever I say you goodbye
Please accept it without any sort of cry,
Because that will be the day
When I will die…
these lines are magical . i read it almost ten times .
it has a beautiful heartfelt touch

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much... those are my fav lines too... thanks for your time reading my work...😃
zunie frost

1 Year Ago

was my pleasure
This is very romantic! I hope it lasts forever

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your wonderful words!!! Thanks a lot😊😄😃
It is a very loving and warm poem. To whoever it is intended for, if at all, I hope the person feels it with all his heart. Lovely read. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Anindita Janhabee

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the sweet visit my dear.....
really appreciate your words...

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