The magical sea of wonder

The magical sea of wonder

 

 

 

 

 

 

The windsurfers tacking in the wind

The seagulls swooping down

The tourists swimming around

The ocean, a magical sea of wonder.

 

The wonder of what lies beneath

The strength of its waves

The reflection of the sun upon the crest

The ocean, a magical sea of wonder.

 

The joy it brings to one and all

The fear it throws at a few

The excitement and thrill

The ocean, a magical sea of wonder.

Reviews

[JanieB]

Thank you Justice for the review.
When I wrote this I was falling asleep at the time, and this is what I thought about. I felt very sleepy and floaty..
The font reminds me of the waves, and the sea.
I appreciate your feedback very much, I am explaining where I was coming from.

[justice]

Okay, this is not a bad poem. It is overly simplistic, the font is terribly distracting, and there is NO variation of sentence structure. I just feel like this poem goes nowhere. It has no story, no real images, and no real emotion to speak of. It is a bunch of frilly language that sounds nice, but doesn't say anything...
Now, do not take what I said before too harshly. I am looking to help you as a writer. I am by no means an expert or know exactly what I am saying. I am a reader and enjoyer of poems. Everyone has their own voice and style. I do not mean to trample on that at all.
You have a nice poem here. It is a great idea. The framework is in place, but I think you need to expand upon it.

[Dark Empress]

sweet and rather peaceful

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

what sweet tranquil wonders dream the ocean pure~ gorgeous descriptive poetic~

[Goodbye]

Very simple and beautiful ode to your cherished ocean! It makes me want to go and bathe in it...Very, very nice.

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The sea is such a strong idea, that it's easy to bring all those images to life..and it is a wonder indeed.. nice poem

[Marie Harrison]

Blissful poetry. I felt calmer and happier after reading it.

[sarah]

This is really nice! it paints a really awsome picture!

[Wondering Mind]

there's another magical sea of wonder I'm constantly diving into