Torn-Up Teddy Bear

Toys have feelings.That's what I say.BTW,read part 2.It's coming up

Teddy was left alone on the floor

Forgotten and lying behind the door

He was all torn-up and dirty on the outside

Hurt and pain was what he felt on the inside

 

How he wished he was loved again

To be able and play again

He misses the sweet voice of his friend

The laughter he used to hear every now and then

 

Many years has gone by

His friend has grown up

A yr later he was found

Still lying on the floor

 

Teddy was glad to his friend

He thought they'd play again

But then,Teddy was wrong

He was sold to another kid named tom ......

Reviews

[Hippy]

i felt sadness for the bear and its a very good poem

[Perfect Imperfection]

I really like it, Teddy seems to be feeling the way most people do when they lose a friend, I hope he was treated well by Tom.

[TDAlibazah]

aww! this poem made me sad :(
I'll keep you, teddy, and i'll fix you!! :))

[Devyani]

Aww.. poor teddy,, reminds me of toy story ..
teddy's thoughts are very much relatable in real life too.
A good read

[Coyote Poetry]

A excellent poem with a sad ending. I was hoping for the Grand kid and the repair shop for Teddy bears. The poem started off sad and then we got some hope. I hope Tom was good to old Teddy. A fun poem to read.
Coyote

[Perdition]

Perfect...Very ,uh..well Very everything...Very true to life and self and then to write and recognize it aloud is the salvation from it. I love it!

[Holly]

Oh my goodness! How old did you say you are? Good writing...keep it up!

[Aline Montz]

I love the sentiment of a neglected teddy bear. And while I agree with Alisha Mark that this poem is a bit of a novice piece, I see beauty in everyone's work. Though I think she did give a constructive review. As you keep practicing, you'll get better. :) But I liked it very much.

[~A.J.P.~]

Nicely done. The emotion carries through well. The rhythm is pretty simple, but for a poem about a child's toy that may be best. I look forward to reading it when it's complete.

[Thomas B. Buckman]

Send me a read request when you finish, then, if you would, tell me how to send read requests. Good read so far!