The Heart of Being

About the self-destructive and somewhat narcissistic nature of humanity

I'm disturbed by the idea of peace
I want to live in a world of dust and ashes
The water dirty, and poisoned by chemicals
I smile as Heaven falls and the system crashes

Slash the tires, break the glass and burn the house
Pent up malice freed to destroy
It's a false Atlantis, now knock it down
With all the hate, and weapons you've deployed

I am human nature personified
The greed and the lust all around
Corrupt and murderous, toxic as Cyanide
I'm just a reflection of you
Mirror image of what dwells inside

I'm horrified by the idea of paradise
And I'm the reason no man dwells in Eden
I was the serpent in the origin, a tainted life
As Adam fades to black and Eve lays screaming

Slash the tires, break the glass and burn the house
Pent up malice freed to destroy
It's a false Atlantis, now knock it down
With all the hate, and weapons you've deployed

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Well-penned poem with some excellent word choice and placement. It stands as dare to the world could never take (and so we should wise-up) but I do feel it needs just a little bit of light. My feel. It reminds me of the short story the Smile by Ray Bradbury. It takes place in a world where the dare was accepted and the darkest side of humanity was indulged, but in the end one man still has beauty in his heart and is willing to take a serious beat down to save the smile of the Mona Lisa, not the painting, just the smile. I want just a little hint of that smile. All that said, this was a fantastic piece. Thank you.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Truly reveals that side of man that's unknowingly destroying the world he lives in. How he seeks for peace through means of violence. Ironic isn't it?

[Clara]

I think you've really delved into the depths of our human nature and it's capacity.
You've described the ugly and evem, despicable parts of being human and yet, there is still that element of hope and wanting to change from within.

Powerful write, Jay. :)

[Lexi Villanueva]

Flows nicely in many ways I love the
Second stanza.

[Brittney]

I loved the fourth stanza. Really interesting. Powerful and twisted, quite different from most poems, that's what really captured my attention. I loved it

[allura]

this is so unique, i love the flow.. nicely done

[Pryde Foltz]

I'm horrified by the idea of paradise
And I'm the reason no man dwells in Eden
I was the serpent in the origin, a tainted life
As Adam fades to black and Eve lays screaming

This is new...awesome

[shallimarRose]

At first as I began my read of this I thought.. Oh another satan poem.. thsn I came to this and it took the wind right out of me.

"I am human nature personified
The greed and the lust all around
Corrupt and murderous, toxic as Cyanide
I'm just a reflection of you"
I AM JUST THE REFLECTION OF YOU!!!!!

Wow, Powerful ink right here JJ... This is so timely in terms of the present condition of things. Relevant and thought provoking for sure. shallimarRose

[Simon Welsh]

Man is Nature's A-Bomb. I can wonder of what inspired this. Nice piece, dude.

[RainDancer1997]

angry angry ad destructful poem. It's very different and I loved it!:) Great job!